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Old 12-08-03, 05:22 PM   #1
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These lyrics that I spew have you lookin sick like the flue
Im too ill for you son but it would be no fun if you knew
You dont got a clue my desire is hotter than fire
It take a miracle man ima lyrical hit man for hire
I bring a empire of punches have you admirin my tendencies
To kill the bunches if I so much as speak at you rhythmically
You fealin me naw you cant comprehend my ability
My facility's farther you cant even fathom my trilogy
You appEArently amazed the way I compose so cohEArently
I took my postEArity alone an made a flow with such clEArity
SincEArely told my shits gold im mythological
Diabolical mold cant be stole its psychological
Every last molecule is deadly like carbon monoxide toxin
John Stocktin cant assist ya medley im micraphone boxin
Stay readily knockin you out just take a knee
See I float like a butterfly an sting like a bee
Im the best the greatest raps Muhammad Ali
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Old 12-08-03, 05:28 PM   #2
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get deleted...

but i thought this was alright....you structured this pretty well....your flow was alright in this, could have used some multies in this though i thought....your vocab in this was pretty good as well...overall this was a pretty good piece...keep at it.
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Old 12-08-03, 06:01 PM   #3
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wasnt really feeling it, started off very simple, but the flow was good, then ya went right off,

'I took my postEArity alone an made a flow with such clEArity'

^^was lost here..seemed like you were jus forcing it....but overall prety average i thought..some good vocab but not used well....pZ
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Old 12-08-03, 09:40 PM   #4
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reply to three open mics, and post links to your replies in this thread, or it gets deleted.
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