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1."dear god" by.Signifikant'
2."My voice within"by.Ace of spades
3."What if?"by.High-ku





I was put in jail sucked like hell And I really hated the smell/
Couldn't aford the bail fo rail, It sucked in that 8 by 6 cell/
Thinking about my past,Being harrassed , smoking grass/
Thinking bout the weight of my mass, wanna break some glass/
Thinking bout all the pain , all the strain , in this endless train/
The main train of pain , in da wrong lane , its insane/
Bout a year went by, thoght id die, my life worth bout a cow pie/
when I go to court ill lie, or at least ill try, im a train bout to colide/
when thinking in this cage, I had found my rage, went to tha next stage/
Id found my hate ,had it made, then my eyes started to glaze/
I was gonna go from wild to tame, couldnt even remember my own name/
When I get out it wont be da same , "I wont take shit from nobody" thats what I claimed./
So when I got out , I started to scream and shout, went my on route/
Felt like sour crout, full of clout, Then I found out what im about !!!!/
I killed all the fuckers that made fun of me , I shot them and hung um from a tree/
I felt fuckin free , I got me a drink some weed and watched the fuckers bleed!/

This was alright i thought....you seem to be getting better with each drop...structure in this was much better than your other ones, keep that up, but towards the end your lines got kinda stretched out just watch out for that stuff, it took away from the flow...but keep at it.

THIS WUS AIGHT

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^^^again, get banned, umm ok well, kinda blah not very interesting to read,, just one question,
"I was put in jail sucked like hell And I really hated the smell/"
did u mean you gave/received head?? lol, if it isnt sart using commas

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Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..