when u think every thang iz good in the hood
and its all goin real nice
doin all you should but it turns to ice
and then it hits you in the face full force like
a missile sent from above
just rains upon you hits you like fallin off a bike
and i cant stand the empty feeling i get from love
it just tears me inside apart
it eats my heart
what is goin on with me and how i feel
will the pain of being alone ever stop and
will it ever heal

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Pain is abscence of tolerance
its the emptyness that conqueres the mind body and soul

yo real raw drop right here......i got the emotion u were conveying so i it got across well......work on ur vocabulary cuz then you could put things across in a more elaborate way. nice job man.!

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sorry but i wasnt feeling no emtion here very simple drop man no hating but structure and all dats out of place. Just seemed really simple shit to me tho but hit me back at mine keep evulating tho

~PEACE~

Yeah this was alright...Yeah your structure could use a bit of work though but just work on it...vocab could be a bit better though as well...kinda a simple drop here but you can elevate and get better at it...just keep at it.

Very simple. Almost drowned the emotions in simplicity. Only at times coming to the surface to get air.

But some of it did come through. It's something to build on really. Elevate. I mean i can see it's bursting (a bit) with something.

...resp...

i know i just get kinda ghetto with the vocab when i get mad u know how it is dont u

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Pain is abscence of tolerance
its the emptyness that conqueres the mind body and soul