North Cakalaki dreamin, betta yet Cali breeze'in da beaches
Drinkin all mourn'in an leav'in pissy up in da even'ins
Outa da El Camino, Reno is all peaches
24 hour casinos, chips stacked 2 da ceil'ins
Shoot'in dice, da life, of a night light balla
In da drop top, hitin spots, 2 make hoochies holla
Ride'in em like Impalas, stuffin em full a dollas
rubbin my log 4 luck like im da fuckin Appolo
Bacardi bottles all hollowed, empty'd in 1 swalla
tear cost apart like Tupac & Big Pappa
drop da beat hot an ill lace da rhyme product
Hear 2 Stay II, lets get dis shit poppin

didnt really like this..apart form being too short,,it seemed forced in places.....but some of what ya was saying i could relate to so......not that bad...lol...pZ.......

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But this was ok...structure was alright i thought could have been a little better...I thought you could have made this a little longer though, seemed a little short....also try adding some multies and internals to make this better....but keep at it.

I wasn't feelin this piece really needed beter flow and alot better content and subject matter all i can say is read around at some the ill heads and see how you can incorporate better shit in your own-1

wasn't really Enjoyen this But it was ok.....Need to Work on ya structure and ya Vocab...ya Flow was alright....It was too short i think it coulder been 2 verse Or 20 Lines That Would Been Betta....MULTIS U NEED MULTIS they Make the Piece So Much Betta Ok.....All and all a good Drop Keep at it Kuz....(v)....