Verse 1:
I force myself into ur ears like Kobe on fuckin females
otha MC's derail an bump sales jus 2 prevail,
in da industry, shady figures hopefully 1 day will c hell
but in da present all we can do is pray dat we dont c jail
recievin mail from federal agents, identity steady changin
police raids keep us vacating our mutha fuckin stations
heart 4-ever stay racin, pace maker 2 pace it,
trippin offa dis chronic as if somebody had laced it
playa hatta's is trippin, pray de neva catch me slippin
leave wounds so big they'll need extension cords 2 stitch em

Hook:
HOLLA THUG LIFE BITCHES!!!!!!
Poverty stricken children
AND 2 ALL MY NIGGAS!!!!!!!!!!
strugglin jus through livin
IS IT REAL OR FICTION!!!!!!!!!
and 2 all those we missin
stay true through da mission
HOLLA THUG LIFE!!

Verse 2:
Semi-Automatics replaced wit mike stands on stage
MC's go out in a blaze of unattainable rage
and holla thug life, made da transition became witness
screamin on mikes like 20 women all in semmision
in da same no1 listen 2 pac till he switched positions
and changed da words revolution 2 thug livin
got shot in vegas an months lata his former freind Chris did
and 2 all who died 4 der beliefs, only bleesins

Hook 2X:

haha
thug life
princible of poverty, injustice, an missery
thug life
da revelotion of american upcoming
haha

Ok this is your 3rd or 4th open mic today and none of them had links/names of replies...Start leaving your links/names or your pieces will get closed.

this is averge..nuttin special..make your verses longer if your gonna make a hook like a song...and atleast have 3 verses

keep elevatin

You Really Suck... Wow... Kill Yourself Now...

^^ LoL

Work on your vocab.. It was an ok piece.. Jus keep elevating

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this was aiight
you went off topic alot tjhough
you'll improve
4.5/10

..This shit is garbage...your wordplay sucked...your concept sucked..overall..you sucked...

Not Feeling This At All...Fake Ass Ja Rule...And Ja Rules Fake, So Your Fucked

Peace

yo sureal take it easy but ya it did need some work

This was ok...

Nothing special.

Pretty good hook...

But the rest was the same fake ass wanna be gangsta shit I've heard a hundred thousand times.

Grow up some, LA_4LYFE...

We ain't buyin it.

4.75/10

Peace

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