http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=98678
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=98691
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=98505

The best concepts come created from true talent
There not forced from fiction, but a real balance
Of real life and what might have happened
Not from gangsta games or film frames
But the true drama and what experience is gained
Through living ya life untamed and unrestrained

Cos the best concepts come from the nuclear
The nucleus of open mic, it aint unscrupulous
Cos its Ludicrous to try and fool with us
Leave ya furious and speechless at the raw skillz
Sending chills down ya spine, written thrills
With every line of every rhyme, I stretch time
Cos ya lose ya self in them when I combine
Genius and intrigue fuse together n refine
Contrasting good and evil to deal with any kind
Hit rewind and read it again, yes ya read right
Nuclear concepts is casting shadows on ya light
‘Radiating’ poison performing perfect every night
And Despite having no forum were still enthralling
Voicing our opinions without verbally calling
Or warning jus Using text as a tool to translate
To elevate and annihilate the opposition
And Leave them wishing with a personal mission

TO BE AS DOPE AS ME……

seams faster pace then your usual but delivered abstract the punches need work but other then that you hit this and repped fam well pop.

At first, I wasn't feeling the contrast between the two stanzas/verses; however, upon reading it over, they actually mixed together quite nicely. Even though the topic was somewhat of a self-glorification, you used some nice concept flips and vocabulary to make up for what lacked in the department of content. There was line that I liked in particular:

Nice flip there, but as I said, the content was elementary as any: crew forums? Come on, dude. With that type of ability, you really ought to up your standards and find a cause to write for. I'd never heard of you prior to reading this piece, but I'll be sure to keep close tabulations on you - you've got potential. Good Luck.

Quality

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yo this was a Nice Piece Deva.....ya had Good Structure Like ya Always Do..ya flow was Good i Like How ya Used it on this one....Ya Threw me off in some bits but other from that it was nicely Done.....so all and all a tight Read Kuz.......

I really wasn't feelin this when I first read it.. But I read it again and then it caught my attention, Idk why but it was better the 2nd time.. This was niice though, to me it was very well put together... keep it up

-Skribbz

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thnx ppl.....jus trying out a new style..pZ

any more comments?..............thnx..pZ