grip the gat, slip the bag,
trip the rat, hit the rat,
get it back, get it done,
get the green, get the gun,
hollow tips, bullet holes,
blow his heart, out his clothes,
take his money, take his weed,
leave the stems, leave the seeds,
rob this nigga, fuckin snitch,
treat his ass, just like a bitch,
fuckin hoe, see what you've done,
next your wife, then your son,
daddy's lil girl, she gonna get it to,
she gonna know, who killed you,
that's the end of my tale,
one more bitch sent to hell

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MJ a.K.a ThaDon
A.T.
dropz

Sup G?

Nice flow...but u need to increase your wordplay. Try to use some metaphors too.

My best lines were: -

"rob this nigga, fuckin snitch,
treat his ass, just like a bitch"

- We all hate snitches. I like the humour - Funny shit!

"daddy's lil girl, she gonna get it to,
she gonna know, who killed you"

- Nice expression of anger.

Tash Shyne.

This was alright....structure needs some work though...should try to make your lines a litte longer and keep them around the same length so its structured good...you had some alright multies in the begining of this, try to use some more of those through out the piece...but keep at it.