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Old 12-18-03, 05:11 PM   #1
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Question The Stand....

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I paint a picture portrait with idillic defecits/
Point blank at canvas, with livid terrorists/
Arch nemesis, 90 degree excorcist/
I Cross heirs to thrones, pin points with tetanus/
Eclipse the heart with a whole vein for blood/
an Archangel's word in his breath too late for us/
Fled the touch of Him on a whim tasting lust/
The stranger you villify will save your hate for what?/
An orphan lost beyond on the foot of Mount Olympus/
The peak will lead the free and root the crown that drowned in silver/
a thousand sinners enter bestial temples housing rivers/
But the second tear collapsed and now they crowd in winters/
Noah's Ark was original atonement/
Pull Excalibur out of the same rock Jesus was stoned with/ purity seeps into the tomb of Tutankhamen/
But the light refracts and now the shadow rules the armour/ beat to death for the pulse of the heartless/
wingspan of afterlife blocks spirits from arches/
Cross the crucifix with sticks and stones from pugilists/ luminous illusions for the humanist to use again/
Emperors retreated from the wrath of their traits/
The circle of ash from the pheonix fanning the flame/
The wheel of fate has spoken and the spokes have fallen off/ it rolls towards the Second Coming pre-holocaust/
I'm driven by the renneisance of humanity's soul/
But the renneisance is scalped without a hair to the throne.............
Stand Strong, Stand Tall!
Stand Up, or Stand Down!
High Standards, I Stand For!
Stand Fast, Stand Now!
I push the envelope of male testosterone/
The Regent's neck severed where the center roams/
ya brainwaves turn the tide as I rest assured/
I see the sun evaporate the liquid of your thoughts/
The voice was just a whisper...


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Old 12-18-03, 05:13 PM   #2
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Old 12-18-03, 05:30 PM   #3
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Old 12-18-03, 05:31 PM   #4
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yeah i thought you showe a good variety of vocab on this.......but ya structure fucked the flow....the lines dont need to be even, jus slide together nicely if ya know what i mean...i jus couldnt get off...other than that some nice content...more mulits would help it i think...but yeah ok...pZ....

check my shit out.......thnx
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Old 12-18-03, 05:34 PM   #5
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yo last poet...........this was pretty hot except for de structure that fell.....ur vocab was fire n it wouldve helped if u used sum multis in there....but opther than that it was hot, keep elevatin son


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Old 12-18-03, 05:35 PM   #6
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...Thanks for the feed..my bad on the structure....^^
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