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I paint a picture portrait with idillic defecits/
Point blank at canvas, with livid terrorists/ Arch nemesis, 90 degree excorcist/ I Cross heirs to thrones, pin points with tetanus/ Eclipse the heart with a whole vein for blood/ an Archangel's word in his breath too late for us/ Fled the touch of Him on a whim tasting lust/ The stranger you villify will save your hate for what?/ An orphan lost beyond on the foot of Mount Olympus/ The peak will lead the free and root the crown that drowned in silver/ a thousand sinners enter bestial temples housing rivers/ But the second tear collapsed and now they crowd in winters/ Noah's Ark was original atonement/ Pull Excalibur out of the same rock Jesus was stoned with/ purity seeps into the tomb of Tutankhamen/ But the light refracts and now the shadow rules the armour/ beat to death for the pulse of the heartless/ wingspan of afterlife blocks spirits from arches/ Cross the crucifix with sticks and stones from pugilists/ luminous illusions for the humanist to use again/ Emperors retreated from the wrath of their traits/ The circle of ash from the pheonix fanning the flame/ The wheel of fate has spoken and the spokes have fallen off/ it rolls towards the Second Coming pre-holocaust/ I'm driven by the renneisance of humanity's soul/ But the renneisance is scalped without a hair to the throne............. Stand Strong, Stand Tall! Stand Up, or Stand Down! High Standards, I Stand For! Stand Fast, Stand Now! I push the envelope of male testosterone/ The Regent's neck severed where the center roams/ ya brainwaves turn the tide as I rest assured/ I see the sun evaporate the liquid of your thoughts/ The voice was just a whisper... __________________ |
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..Uppin..^^
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yeah i thought you showe a good variety of vocab on this.......but ya structure fucked the flow....the lines dont need to be even, jus slide together nicely if ya know what i mean...i jus couldnt get off...other than that some nice content...more mulits would help it i think...but yeah ok...pZ....
check my shit out.......thnx |
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IP: E7CB E3DC
yo last poet...........this was pretty hot except for de structure that fell.....ur vocab was fire n it wouldve helped if u used sum multis in there....but opther than that it was hot, keep elevatin son
peace
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...Thanks for the feed..my bad on the structure....^^
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