Gangster prayer

Dios mio..,
Please hear me tonight.
I need so much guidance
To live my life right.
Sometimes the preasure is so hard to bare,
I often wonder if anyone cares.
How can i wake up,and face a new day?
Knowing I have to live my life this crazy way.

Dios mio..,
Forgive me my sins.
I want to change,but I dont know how to begin.
Give me the streanght to resist the life I desired.
Help me get away from the nightly gun-fires.
Porfavor Diosito..,
Bless my family
who's eyes silently plead for me not to go out as, I leave.
And please bless my mother,
Who cries every night
Worrying that I'll be killed, in another gang fight

Dios mio..,
Please answer my prayers.
Please let me know you're listening up there.
When will it all end?
Whats it all for?
To prove to my homies?
Yeah Im down...Im hard core
Sometimes I wonder..,
How will I die??
By a bullet wound or a knife in my side?

Dios mio..,
PLease hear me tonight.
Give me the courage and streanght to live my life right.
Please show me the way,
God show me the light
Help give my heart peace,
So i wont have to fight
Thank you for the forgiveness,lord
And for still being there
Most of all thank you for listening to this sinner prayer
~*~amen~*~

to give my honest opinion i didnt like it that much because the rhyme scheme was too sketchy. I like the message because i can relate to it but i am also dissapointed that u didnt portray it in a better way, by better i mean more heartfelt way. well it was your poem not mine so its hard for me to rate it but im just giving my opinion. i liked the spanish in the poem couse it adds sumtin to it, like i feel good couse i can relate to the poem more. so overall make the rhyme scheme better, more imagery would be nice, and more emotion. out of ten id give your poem a 7. keep ya head up, its hard to make a poem thats great but its always great to make a poem.

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thanx 4 givin me tha honest feedbak but i think i have elevated a little since mi last piece thanx again 4 really puttin effort into ur response much luv ~alratoz~

Shoo it was alright to me. But prayers are hard to write in my opion because you have to express every emotin in a certian way or it don't come out right. But you did yours so
keep doin ya thing