Leave some feed back please

You wanna be a faggot, then get from round here,
take your lil thingy, and wax it off with nair,
Treat you like a slinky, push you down the stairs,
take ya like paper, easy to tear,
fuck with a force, unable to bare, his sanity,
bout to let it go and blow away everything around me,
you as fucked as bein in the desert with no cantene,
as rapin's my daily routine,
everthing i see, and ain't shit clean,
the whole damn world is dirty,
like i said my sanity's not sturdy,
hazard lights on to warn me,
about to collapse and blast feelin ornary,
life of porn and weed,
sick tricks want me to piss in there teeth,
swallow my kids when they breath,
stomach pumped, lil images of me

Reviewed:
word perfect (2)
Viscocity

This was a real good wordplay verse...

I liked what I saw.

But aside from the wordplay...

This was a self-prop, mostly blah verse.

Sorry to say that, but after you've read 8000 verses about how bad ass someone is or how much weed or drink they intake...

It gets old.

But, you used some nice wordplay that made this not suck so bad...

5/10

Peace

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