we doin it tournament style the rules
no crew hatin
no swayin votes
16 lines
vote and comment on the other battle

yo Corleone dogg... I got 2 battles goin' right now... maybe next time

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Ah... fuck it.... me & Cupcake's battle is dead....
I'm checkin' in... Blind spit? JUst go? Is that what we're doin'?

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yeah what we doin, and lol, why am i, Mr. 3 posts, battling a middleweight

Ya wanna be like D12, what are you twelve, You gonna end up in a body bag on a shelf
Cuz There is no PROOF of you bein' a MC, I Drop The ROOF on you tryin' a beat me, you can beat meat
Listen to the Beat of your heart, before I pull it apart and feed it to ya, Rip out ya tonsils and shove it in ya nostrils
I do sick shit cuz I am a sick prick and proud of it, You from Denver you can't be proud of it
You shiver when my name is mentioned, Quit ya bitchin', yeah you new, but you go it too deep battlin' me
I'll lyrically juke you like I was DAnte Hall, Turn around and nuke you, fuck makin' you fall
I'm impossible to defeat, And in mouth is where I'll place your feet, Doesn't matter the weapon you better retreat
You need a tampon, your leakin', Words comin' out that don't make sense, It's Village PImp better than 50 Cent
I'll leave you like South Park kids, they Snowed in, Yeah, White like the color of ya skin, when you start rappin'
Bad start for ya Proof, To tell you the truth, I already don't like you, SO FUCK YOU, I know you can say you weren't blazed
BUT YOU ARE THE PROOF, And Guys are what made ya dick raise, SO continue on ya ass chase
But your about as good a rappa as Cartman, Corleone shouldn't have made you start man
Too bad, I wanna know ya thoughts, Remove ya brains, All over the walls and things, This is shit that you can't change
While I rip off ya dick and shove it in ya ass, Roll ya ankle and smoke it, Ya know I do sick shit they don't do in Denver
You come colder than December, While my flows hotta than June, Ice plus fire don't mix good
YOur lyrics are good for a cartoon, You ain't from the hood, you from the rich suburbs, I am bitch so I'll leave ya dead on the curbs

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whats the problem with bein a fuckin true newb/
that doesnt mean u wont soon hear the statement u lose/
ill got to footlocker and buy myself new shoes/
and kick you with them till i get a black and blue bruise/
this muthafucka thinkin hes a P.I.M.P./
probably a dick but see me im friendly/
battlin me, only because im new/
and if you win, you know i'll find you/
u probly at home, doin drugs and meth/
if i could read ur future, id see slugs and death/
lookin somewhere in ur lungs for breath/
but u couldnt breath, the last one stung ya head/
when u read this, you wont deliver/
a better diss, busy killin ur liver/
but im done with this shit dawg its over/
take this diss to ur bitches house and show her/

Nice Verse man.... you'll be pretty good if ya keep workin' on ya shit... aight?

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hey thanks, this is my first battle on this website, ok ever, but yeah thanks

village pimp gets this, even though he went way over the line limti!!

better personals, more personals
harder hittin personals bett punches
pretty much every category goes to village
except strucutre
your flow is off
and sum of your bars dont make sense

v/village pimp

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Axiom

ok, ok, constructive critism would be nice, its my first battle, what did i do wrong

Eh... fuck it.... I'm lazy right now..... I wasn't thinkin' bars/lines.... Who fucking cares, either way... you know

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okay strucutre
lines didnt follow a storyline, jumped subject to subject
....this muthafucka thinkin hes a P.I.M.P./
probably a dick but see me im friendly/
battlin me, only because im new/
and if you win, you know i'll find you/
u probly at home, doin drugs and meth/

umm head does not rhyme with death
use better wordplay

construcutive enuff

okay strucutre
lines didnt follow a storyline, jumped subject to subject
....this muthafucka thinkin hes a P.I.M.P./
probably a dick but see me im friendly/
battlin me, only because im new/
and if you win, you know i'll find you/
u probly at home, doin drugs and meth/

umm head does not rhyme with death
use better wordplay

construcutive enuff

and village pimp

your bars, although long, which is not a good thing, hit alot harder
your personals, there was plenty more, and they all made sense, and were used well

all in all, village pimp wins

v/ village

most of my lines seem ok to me, pimp used the words proud of it both times as a rhyme, and im trying to not just rhyme the last syllable

drugs and meth
slugs and death
lungs for breath

long ass batte!!!....but village takes this wit complex punches and flow and real good vocab.. proof battle people on your level and work on punches, vocab and flow maybe try goin to the W.E.C maybe they can help you out...

Vote:Vill

will u drop an honest vote on this please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111122

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