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08-18-06, 01:28 AM | #1 | ||
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Bars of Death..new track from yours truely
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Hear my new track...Bars of Death
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08-18-06, 01:49 AM | #2 | ||
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turn ya vocals down... beat sounds familiar... need a lil more emotion... kinda diggin the chorus jus needs that lil bit more of emotion in it.. "in the hood like 50 cent" how's that finish?... anyway decent lyrics... yeah just up the emotion and quiet the vocals a bit... decent. stay up pzz
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08-18-06, 02:52 AM | #3 | ||
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the beat is cool i reckon......
the lyrics are cool.....got good punchlines......just the emotion isn't on the same level as the beat ya know? and up the quality a tad bit and this track would be schorching....other then that track was nice.....6/10
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08-18-06, 03:29 AM | #4 | ||
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listening through ATH M40 fs's
beat i heard a jillion times before. you should ease up on the reverb on your vocals it's a little too high. your flow gets lumpy, some of the punches in the first verse were ight and some just fell flat. the hook was ok, not busted but not like WOW either and the qual on it sucked. second verse was better than the first as far as lyrical content, still no bars that had me like "OH WOW" or dyin laughin or anything, just "heh, ok". For a song called Bars of Death I'd expect some more raw animal shit. real talk as always. 1 *used 2 big rmx*
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08-24-06, 02:59 AM | #5 | |
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you drop quite a bit
ok your coming in too loud turn yourself down liking the flow really smooth but lyrically nothing special for something called bars of death i like the hook damn all loud again lol at cold cuts line liked this verse better but nothing that wowed me fix the volume itd helpp allllllllllllllllllllloooot
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