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08-19-06, 11:55 PM | #1 | ||
A Life Of Chryme
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Love stumbles
IP:
The sunsets sweat begins to drip
A days work is over or is it? Butteflies flying at dusk No bat's insight; peacefull The loved ones are lip locked Hearts sprung blooming gracefully Its not overated no Its unheard of;Not believed in Happiness is not granted It is achieved Though many look past Though the past looks foward Which doesnt make since. Because the future looks back. The lovers past is not forgotten Though the future is thought apon Peace is never gained..nor is trust They will not suffer no Because though their lips were locked She was sly she found the key She is free...her lips now unlocked Links to come
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08-21-06, 02:20 AM | #2 | |
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IP:
ok this was somewhat an enjoyable but somehting in this was telling me you forced some of your lines to try and fit in....i mean you did GOOD dont get me wrong but it feels like you just through sentences in without thinking about em sometimes but this made me think and made me enjoy my time reading it, its worth the read..... so nice up's on it my dude!...
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