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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

murder. 10 lines.lol.

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check .

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Words is full of gimmiks, enough of the talk bro i think we've all had it
Cuz only people praisin Words of God is Alcholic's and drug Addicts

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his crews full of fags..
no pussy for miles so I gaurantee that u'll die..
besides, coke would rather chase Adam n Jon then push Suicide.
N' no one takes u for real
this comic act'll get fuckin pulverized
coz I move Coke too.. Hell, every day I put jokes aside.

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yep, this dude's from 04, and i think we can till you aint battle in a while
Cuz Words your style is completely fucked like virgins doing doggy style

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**spul can't vote in this battle, we both know we have beef...it is what it is....**

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Wordz

his crews full of fags..
no pussy for miles so I gaurantee that u'll die..
besides, coke would rather chase Adam n Jon then push Suicide.
ehh I know what you were trying for. But didn't hit hard really.
N' no one takes u for real
this comic act'll get fuckin pulverized
coz I move Coke too.. Hell, every day I put jokes aside.
lol good shit. I don't think I've seen that used before. Nice. wording could have been better tho.

Overall cool shit. Liked the 3 line structure. Was different. First punch was ehh, but second was good.


Coke

Words is full of gimmiks, enough of the talk bro i think we've all had it
Cuz only people praisin Words of God is Alcholic's and drug Addicts
This was ok. Seemed too statementish. Could have been worded better to hit as a harsher blow.
yep, this dude's from 04, and i think we can till you aint battle in a while
Cuz Words your style is completely fucked like virgins doing doggy style
ehh. I've seen the concept used a couple times before. But i'm sure you ain't seen them. So not bad.

Overall, okay drop. Wording is what killed a lot of your punches from being effective.

So overall, I gotta go with wordz for having the only above avg punch in this battle. the Jokes aside one.


v/Wordz

p.s. if he can vote in my battle, I can vote in his. Honest vote.

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Words is full of gimmiks, enough of the talk bro i think we've all had it
Cuz only people praisin Words of God is Alcholic's and drug Addicts
no

his crews full of fags..
no pussy for miles so I gaurantee that u'll die..
besides, coke would rather chase Adam n Jon then push Suicide.
this was worded badly and I'm still wondering if it was worded well, would it even be a good diss? I doubt it.
N' no one takes u for real
this comic act'll get fuckin pulverized
coz I move Coke too.. Hell, every day I put jokes aside.
worded sucky, but I get what you're saying, meh.

yep, this dude's from 04, and i think we can till you aint battle in a while
Cuz Words your style is completely fucked like virgins doing doggy style
maybe

this battle was a toss up and fucking wack

fuck you both

pz

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his crews full of fags..
no pussy for miles so I gaurantee that u'll die..
besides, coke would rather chase Adam n Jon then push Suicide.
even saying he'd rather be gay then push sue aside doesn't make a whole lot of sense, almost saying he'd rather be gay then gay
N' no one takes u for real
this comic act'll get fuckin pulverized
coz I move Coke too.. Hell, every day I put jokes aside.
I did like this though, it was simple and was worded bad but still cool, nto as effective as it could have ben though


Words is full of gimmiks, enough of the talk bro i think we've all had it
Cuz only people praisin Words of God is Alcholic's and drug Addicts
I liked this too, btu again wording takes away from the effect
yep, this dude's from 04, and i think we can till you aint battle in a while
Cuz Words your style is completely fucked like virgins doing doggy style
I liked this too worded bad again but metaphor was clever, went over my head at first though lol


Cool, I didn't get the sue a side part, thought it was a dudes name that used to battle, and of course it sounds fine to you you wouldn't have posted it if you thought the wording was bad, but I did, and Im sorry if my opinion hurt your ego, cause no body said you were trash.

cokes lines both connected but weakly based on wording, I think the first punch could have been dope as fuck if worded right, the second didn' come as hard but again could have.
Wordz 2nd punch hit harder then cokes, but even after the clear up I wsn't feeling the first at all. Its a hard vote to make.......but ima say coke, say what you want

peace

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It's ok to make money, Legit or illegal...
But it's treason when you turn your back on your people.

If you look in his sig it says his crew is called Suicidal poets... I basically called him a fagget in my setup line then he doesn't care about his crew.. just dickriding Jonathon and adam while pushing suicide (Sue a side<--- as in some random girl because he's gay) Not really that complex but you have to read into it to get it.

Also, I dont see anything wrong with the wording on my 2nd punch to be honest so maybe if you could enlighten me on a better way to write it, then I'll understand more of what you mean.

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I know you only asked being a smart ass but ima tell you anyway.

coz I move Coke too.. Hell, every day I put jokes aside.

It was basic not very creative its like the concept popped in your head then you stopped there, something like

'when it comes to coke, Im making seriouse moves'
or something along that line, the seriouse moves part would tie well with the put jokes aside, .......but I'm not the only one who said that.

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It's ok to make money, Legit or illegal...
But it's treason when you turn your back on your people.

Thanks for being a dick head one way but I actually asked becasue I WAS interested on your thoughts on wording. Personally, now that I read it, I do see something I can change in the setup, not the execution because I re-wrote it like 20 times before I ended up with it.

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well my apologies then, but you usually come across as an arrogant guy

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It's ok to make money, Legit or illegal...
But it's treason when you turn your back on your people.

Words - You had some interesting concepts but didn't execute them well.
The wording killed the first punch, it could've been pretty dope. The second one was cool but wording hurt it too, an interesting concept though

Coke - Your first punch I didn't feel like it hit hard and was kind of a weak concept. The second punch didn't seem that fresh i've seen a bunch of stuff like that before so that was mehish.

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