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11-18-06, 04:22 PM | #1 | ||
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"HellBound" (First Post on RV)
IP:
This is an old verse of mine, buh I like it, not for any particular reason. Feed is appreciated
I wish I could go back, to when my parents tried to give birth to me/ I woulda begged God, to put anyone else on this earth but me/ Cuz knowin what I know now, it's not worth it, i've got a bad destiny/ And I know it's only a matter of time, that Hell is comin next for me/ It woulda been easier on my parents, they wouldn'a had to raise a hooligin/ No wonderin 'Is he doin drugs?' or 'Is he cuttin school again?'/ And the shit I see in nightmares haunts me day to day/ It's like Satan is sittin there, waitin for me to fade away/ I've seen death with my 2 eyes, thought about murder with bare hands/ And when I look forward, I see exactly where Hell stands/ All but 2 feet infront of me, I stare blankly into the abyss/ Planned on bein a success, never thought it would end like this/ The devil's draggin me in, but I'm tryin to claw my way to god/ Cuz I've managed to hold strong to my religion, in a world where religion is odd/ But every day it's a struggle, God's there, but is he listenin?/ And my friends can't tell im hurtin, cuz on the outside i'm glistenin/ But inside that mask, lies a soul that was condemned a long time ago/ So I turn to this rap shit, turn my pains into hot rhymes n flows/ Drown my sorrows into this pad, but eventually the pen'll run out of ink/ And when that happens, Hell is the only place left for me to sink/
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11-19-06, 03:39 PM | #2 | ||
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IP:
not a very good peice to be honest,flow was very stretched because of the length of lines multis weren't used enough and the ones you used were too simple,concept was okay,keep writing
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