To gain composure i disconcern and MEDITATE
Focus ma MIND STATE relax and lower HEART RATE
My target sits quietly unaware of my impending PRESENCE
Avoid farming PEASENTS espionage is my ESSENCE
In silence move through ROOMS and HALLS
Katana and Shruiken all ENCLOSED by the SHAWL
"knock knock/ What is the password?/ life is just a drop within an ocean" Click This Is It
Katana UNSHEATHED heads fall like autumn LEAVES
Hear guards arrivin quick but they are easy to DECEIVE
Before the shogun is even realised as DEAD
I'm scalin walls retreat to mountain so before lord buddha i can CONFESS
After years of training my task has been COMPLETED
Moments of true ENLIGHTENMENT and tyranny DEFEATED
Now its the time for me to offer my PENNANCE
for the killings as PRESENTS and mis-reading Buddha's LESSONS
It's only in death thast life is REALISED
An irony of an irony, the role of man in neither masked nor DISGUISED
Being is being and sadness is short LIVED
So why search for the truth if the points will be MISSED

"Namu Amida Butsu" In the name of the Amida Buddha

Death accept me.

K i kno the subject changes direction a bit but I just wrote it how it was in ma head. so hit me up wit sum comments

Nice man, i like it I thought it was real good,

Nice and complexed rhyme, it dont matter the subject changes direction a bit.

the start was real nice and then knock knock bit worked well, then with the high standard continued throughout,

coo shit dawg like the concept, u had good vocab,
lost flow on sum points loved the last 4 lines
good work holla

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aight sound def appreciatin yas givin me feedback. uppin

yeah that was some nice wordplay

it alright to stray subjects as long as when you crossova you keep the audience interested in what u sayin...fasho

cant remember using any word play in this. anyway uppin for some more constructive comments

Thats Some Str8 Up Shit Man.
I Think Im Starting To Like Your Nija Philosphy.
Keep Up The Str8 Ryhmes.
Peace N Hate
Never Gonna Withstand My Unheavenly Wait...

You started Nice...but then it got Wack....just work on it a little more



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thanks black knight appreciatin it but rawdeadly how is it wack the concept changes into philosophy but look at the title. if u tell me why its wack or sumone else does then fair enough ill accept but dont criticise witout tellin me why.

why this not gettin replies. im not sayin its the hottest thing on here but considering the amount of people i have replied to im gettin fuck all here. sum constructive criticism please not one liners

I liked it in places, thought the concept was sharp in places, it was mos def a good idea and ya explored it well... The knowledge words were important here, thats what ya needed to know and you did use a lot, it was interesting to read, but it shoulda been built up through a storyline or a twist or something... The rhyme scheme was tidy well used, more internal rhymes woulda made it flawless... Vocab and wordplay combined well together, but I think ya shoulda pushed it further by making the concept more interesting... Keep spitting though man, liked this a lot still...

Peez...

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and guess what.....uppin again!

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