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08-11-04, 01:49 PM | #1 | |
DA FLAMETHROWER
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Get 'n' Where I Fit 'n'
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ayo dis iz a freestyle off da top of da dome
......................................like sweat...... flows so vicious n sickenin it'll leave u green like SHREK.... wit water above ya neck, hard 4 u 2 breath u greive cuz everything i acheive u wanna be so u see dat im da originater u a perpitrator a hater cuz i shine ya lime light is DARKER dan ........................................DARTH VADER.... so later bet u like wut u see n garuntee u bite cuz im n da NFL n u just a mighty might so vote on my battles post a link n i'll do da same....... cuz im deadly spittin fire cuz DRAG~ON iz da .................................................n ame... phatinum http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=138668 ice pick http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=138867 DON http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=139290 r.i.p http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=141250 V0cab http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=141251 1
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08-11-04, 02:03 PM | #3 | |
DA FLAMETHROWER
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IP:
yo vote on sum of my
battles dey gettin slept on man thanx 1
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08-11-04, 02:43 PM | #4 | |
Light Weight
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IP:
you suck dick
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08-11-04, 02:43 PM | #5 | |
Light Weight
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IP:
jokes, u need to fix the structure but this was pointless
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08-11-04, 02:53 PM | #6 | ||
DA FLAMETHROWER
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IP:
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stop fre postin on my shit all u wanna do iz talk shit as soon as i get outta of a battle ima give u ya first L
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08-11-04, 02:50 PM | #7 | ||
Moderator
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IP:
This isnt very good at all..
Structure is good, flow is pretty good.. You had a few multis.. wordplay was simple and wack.. Punchlines were weak.. Just overall, not a very strong peice.. Keep posting and Elevating.. Please return the favor on my drop - http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=141576 Thanx. |
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