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Old 03-06-07, 08:34 PM   #1
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I'm Gone (if u like deep rap with meaning you'd like this)

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New shit from me.


Title: I'm Gone
Beat: I Tried - Bone Thugs ft. Akon
Concept: Deep shit everyone could probably relate to in some way shape or form

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=5085095

Enjoy, leave RTF links. (Just don't leave links for me to RTF if your feed is you already returning the feed i left on another one of ur pieces. ya dig?)

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Old 03-08-07, 05:09 AM   #3
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Deep Track Man...... I Liked How U Were Switchin Up Tha Flow Through Tha Verses... First Puttin That Emphasis Down For A Strong Start Then Usin A Smooth Flow To Ride Out Thru Tha Beat...... Chorus Was Dope Too And Flowed Between Well, I Thought Maybe It Coulda Hit Harder But The Emotion In This Piece Kept It All Real Man.... Definately Got That Universal Relater Approach To It.... Respect Man
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Old 03-08-07, 07:42 PM   #4
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Good lookin fam...Thanx a lot for the feed. uppin
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Old 03-09-07, 02:10 AM   #5
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i like the piano in the beginning...dude this beat is hot

intro..talkin in the beginning..its cool..a little long..but you get the message across


verse 1 - i like the multis in this nice..never heard you before..breaths sound real loud so its kinda weird..lyrics i like...definitely something people could relate to..i like that last line.."i dont wanna live but i dont wanna die" good job

hook - mixing isnt too good...make the recording centered a little louder

verse 2 - here u come with more multis which is cool but might take away from the song cause it might be hard to tell what you sayin...flow is simple and stays consistent..jus might get a lil boring....

verse 3 - i wish you woulda came a little more personal..a lot of what you say is real general..its cool but if you brought something a little more personal it woulda been more deep..just my personal opinion.


overall a cool track..never heard u before..something refreshing for me since im not into a lot of the gangster gangster songs that are posted on RV..get at me if u wanna collabo on a track...
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Old 03-09-07, 02:15 AM   #6
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No homo, I like your voice.
Where you from?
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 03-09-07, 02:22 AM   #7
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Nevermind. You're from Chicago.. I can hear it in your voice
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 03-09-07, 03:22 AM   #8
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yo kid you got a nice flow on the nice..i like the samples on this track its from the heart...i'd spit some sick shit on this track 4 sho....oh yea your drums are sick too yo...lemme kno whats good...if u got some grimey dark beat get at me trust me
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Old 03-11-07, 10:50 AM   #9
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Thanx for all the feed y'all. Glad y'all liked it n took time out to peep it. To those gettin at me for collabos, send me some stuff n we'll see cuz it's kinda hard for me to record as fast as some of y'all cuz i don't got a studio at home anymore. But hit me up n we'll see. Thanx. 1
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Old 03-11-07, 10:54 AM   #10
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This beat puts me in a reflective mode...nice


"Im fittin to die soon"

^^Do you mean that? Careful...the power of life and death is in the TONGUE.


Nice soundin track tho bro




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Old 03-11-07, 02:54 PM   #11
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this is hot...if you had better quality this would be sick

you should've changed your flow more in the second verse it reminds of the first verse to much.....but other than that..its cool....

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Old 03-11-07, 07:43 PM   #12
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Thanx, glad y'all like it. Uppin for more feed
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