want critique on this:

So you wanna be a star??.. let me make you blink
have thoughts of throwing winks at god... for an asylum;
cause if he fall to hell.. you know i'm gona find im


let me know wat u think??

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// PESSIMIZIM IS THE MEKANISM
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not bad at all!
2nd line could of been worked a little better...
don't get me wrong i'm still a newbie on here...
just giving honest option

give me some feedback...
just a short little punch...


Your from the "Dirty" ya aint so fresh and clean...
ya texts are so "thrownback" got me thinkin' ya got a "time machine"

Radizaim your flows are weak they my head hurt,
got me thinking you gave me a brain "aneurysm"


sorry man, no hate, your fam, that wasnt even a good hit...
give me a hit back when you get a chance

aight ,aight catch it ........

your flows like H2O "hot-to-off", just a second rate nock off
in the front line hide the "self"
don't want ya essence in the presence of a menace
strip ya soul to adolesence

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// PESSIMIZIM IS THE MEKANISM
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Ha Ha.....yall Youngins......
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Yo what yall dont understand and fail to see and grasp,
Is the fact that you all have earned the right to kiss ma ass.

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Originally Posted by Indeph Lyricalsolja you illy on the sickness tip.

ya thinking your gonna take this win, nigga i'm "native" to this son
this ain't a "rain dance" its called beating you in this battle like a "war drum"

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^^^ your lost post Radiziam was hot

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Haha Funny .....................

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// PESSIMIZIM IS THE MEKANISM
OF REALITIES ALGORITHMS ////