Yo this some crazy shit i came up wit, i realy want feedback on this one. Holla....


yo yo yo, i sit outside in the dark spark up another L.
Cops chase me through the park this my vison of hell.
Lookin for a nice spot to stash
the half-ounce of hash.
jumpin ova the fence ,get up fast and dash.
My vision is blured cuz im so fuckin high.
Hidin behind my mans crib i see red lights flashin by.
i got the double-deuce on me but i aint shootin no cops.
Not over this weed, maybe over some rocks.
So i jump to the roof top
just to check out the scene.
5-0 everywhere, this is like part of a dream.
A real bad one at that.
Then i look back
theres a cop wit his gat
I jump off and hear a loud fuckin clap.
i land and jet off
Scared as fuck, this cop tryin to blow my fuckin head off.
As im runin i hear this lil demon talkin bout "YO, NIGGA, LED OFF"
He continous to say.
"IF YOU POP THAT PIG, I SHOW YOU THE WAY,
LEAD YOU DOWN TO MEXICO WIT CONTINOUS YE
YOULL BE MAKIN BIG PAPER LIKE THE REAL NINO AND SHIT,
IN ABOUT 10 YEARS YOULL HAVE YOUR OWN CASINO AND SHIT"
im like naw fuck that you aint real, you gotta be fake.
must be them acid hits kickin in late.
He was like " WORD? AIGHT, FOLLOW THAT PATH.
SEE HOW MANY BULLETS GONNA LAND ON YOUR ASS"
C'MON DOG THESE COPS AINT CHASIN YOU TO LOCK YOU UP.
THESE PIGS AFTER YOU TO POP YOU UP.
so i just went nuts and sprayed the cop.
and folowed the little demon all the way till he stoped.
then everything got even darker and the temperature drop
then he looked at me and laughed, and i was like "yo wassup"
"wheres my ride across the border, wheres the ye what the fuck"
He was like "HA, YOUSE A DUMB MOTHAFUKA, YOU GAVE IN TO VANITY
THERES A WAR BETWEEN GOD AND US AND WE WINING HUMANITY"
then i started thinkin tryin to keep a steady head.
then i realized..... i WAS already dead.
there was an angel and a devil and they both put me to tha test.
I followed the devil, and as for the angel? well i shot him on the chest.............................

YOU WHY CATS SLEEPIN ON THIS MAD PROPS GOD I LIKED THIS AND CANT REALLY SAY ANYTHING MISSING

thas whassup yo, i really apreciate the thoughts ima make sure to check all your shit out, ight.

peace

uppin it up

Ill IMAGERY....Nice Post....Ay Check-Out My two posts in Poetic Scriptures....Prolly aint yo Style BUt Holla.....

up, up, up....

Nice Lyrical Spit Nino.
I Like Dis Piece Cuz In A Fucked Up Way
I Can Relate Cept There Was 2 Devils Sted Of One.
Check Out My Peieces
There Called Words Of Closure And Fact N Fiction
Peace Out...

this was ill... like DMX meets Eminem... good story, good rhymes... keep em' coming...

yea, thanx for tha ups, ima make sure to check your pieces out, ight, peace

uppin one more time

that was a nice ass spit...
i was feelin that all the way through...
i liked that twist at the end too...
it kind of reminded me of a a piece i dropped called "that concience"...
nice fuckin drop though
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