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06-17-04, 05:15 AM
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#1
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New to RB
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aye lookin 4 sum CONSTRUCTIVE feedback...
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yea im pretty new 2 dis, so it aint great, but neway its jst a rant about shit..
every mornin i wake up to tha same// im sick of fightin n losin in dis game// for ppl like me dere is nuttin 2 gain, no fame// the life i live seems 2nd best to dying// i get knockd down everytime i try flying// it jst allays feels like im drowing// e'where i look, i see faces frowning// no compassion, verbal bashin, cliques clashin// in such a fashion, this ride of mine is crashin// i take this knife to my wrist, hope 2 let go tha pain// why is it like this?? its fuckin insane// i hope to join the Lord in his reign// yet through the sorrow i persevere// all i want is sum1 to listen, 2 hear// which is why i turn to this rap// i gotta relkease this crapp// get rid of this dead weight// ayo looking for feedback pls
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R.O.D YOUNG SMIRF:LEADER PIERR'E MADISON:CO-LEADER AND ORGANIZER DIPSET BOY:CO-ASST LEADER 3RD IN COMMAND XXVENOMXX:General 4TH IN COMMAND TRACKSHIT: SOLDIER ANDU09:SOLDIER KOOL COL-B: SOLDIER EMMADA59: SOLDIER B-MORE: SOLDIER [REAL+POLITIK]:SOLDIER RIDE OR DIE
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06-17-04, 05:25 AM
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#2
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IP:
hey yo, that some nice shit, deep. n Nice flow, goes together nicely. couple thangs- 1, it don't look like you rhymin in bars, once ya do that, jus make sure the bars themselves rhyme too. and 2, Multi's are any MC/Texcee's friend. (multiple syllable rhyming.) and inners (check tutorials) jus add to the elevation. Nice verse, homes. I was feelin that. if you new to this, you gon be Ill in weeks/months time.
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06-17-04, 05:33 AM
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IP:
aiight thanks 4 dat, glkad ur feelin it
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R.O.D YOUNG SMIRF:LEADER PIERR'E MADISON:CO-LEADER AND ORGANIZER DIPSET BOY:CO-ASST LEADER 3RD IN COMMAND XXVENOMXX:General 4TH IN COMMAND TRACKSHIT: SOLDIER ANDU09:SOLDIER KOOL COL-B: SOLDIER EMMADA59: SOLDIER B-MORE: SOLDIER [REAL+POLITIK]:SOLDIER RIDE OR DIE
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06-17-04, 09:32 AM
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(00)O=(00) <-- I will knock you the fuck out........
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IP:
yea it was pretty good i guess u coulve worked on a few things but overall not to bad....
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06-17-04, 01:49 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP:
it was str8 i like it & if u keep workin hard at it u'll get 2 ur potential
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06-17-04, 02:53 PM
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#6
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Banned: Cheating
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IP:
it was ok but u'll get betta ova time u know
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06-17-04, 07:36 PM
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Flyweight
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IP:
I think it sound like any other nigga livin' in misery. Keep it up though dude!
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