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12-05-03, 03:28 PM | #1 | ||
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Love at first site: verse 2
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for those who haven't read it or wutever.
here's the first verse: Love at first site: verse 1 Verse 2 Either procure flight with this angel, or burst into tears// I confided confidence in myself by submergin my fears// Slowly embraced paces I reaped my courage for words// Somehow everything seemed like a reoccurrence at first// Introductions were absolute, I felt I knew her before this summit// The very entity of my dreams, I was already equipped to commit// Deprivation of previous depression, my heart resisted dismay// Till this I was insensible to the fact that bliss existed this way// I breeched supreme glory when I conquered her askin me// An emergent of miracles, my aspirations converged veracity// Insurance was superfluous, my feelings became explicit// I had no real reason to subsist until she became listed// its about actually speaking to her. the third verse will be up later. and for those who don't know: verse 1- when i first saw her verse 2- when we met verse 3- where we are now and where i want to be threads i replied to: My bitch I'm ready U ain't a rapper peACE |
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12-05-03, 04:02 PM | #2 | ||
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no feedback huh...cmon peepz...i could really use some...
this is for my princess...and i want to know if you guys like it or not... so i can show it to her...thanx peACE |
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12-05-03, 04:08 PM | #3 | ||
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This was good i thought...it was something i could relate to cause i write a lot of love songs lol but i liked this...You had good emotion in this i thought, you said what you needed to and got it across good..i felt this verse though...everything seemed good overall....keep at it man.
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12-05-03, 04:17 PM | #4 | |
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this is as solid as anyother track here regardless of topic...emotion imadry sincerity poetic concept everything linked well and paints a great perception of love ...great work
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12-05-03, 04:33 PM | #5 | |
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nice drop, very well thought up. gr8 vocab(sounds like u swallowed a dictionary lol)
good structure and wordplay, and multi's, keep it up and thanks for the reply. |
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12-05-03, 05:45 PM | #6 | ||
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IP:
thanx for the feed back. much appreciation. this came from the heart.
i enjoy writing about how i feel or felt. and this was the result thanx again. peace |
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12-05-03, 05:50 PM | #7 | |
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i thought it was good great picture and flow. you used a good vocab and it seemed like it had alot of feelings in it.
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12-05-03, 10:37 PM | #8 | ||
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thanx man, i appreciate the feedback. i enjoyed writing this. so i'm hoping
people like it. i'm glad that you do. thanx again. peace |
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12-06-03, 12:28 AM | #9 |
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Either procure flight with this angel, or burst into tears//
I confided confidence in myself by submergin my fears// ^^u piece of shit that was a got damn nice line. felt that one for sure im jealus . keep up that shit hopin the third verse keep s up with this .....nice 2 verses respond to mine in my sig.
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12-06-03, 09:15 PM | #10 | ||
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thanx dao. i luv you like a brotha. hahaha.
that line is deep. don't you know. its wut makes and breaks the situation of love....... .................................... .............. peace |
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12-06-03, 09:21 PM | #11 | ||
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IP:
yo this was a great verse.. keep it up dawg.. i was feelin it crazy style
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12-06-03, 09:29 PM | #12 | |
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IP:
nice drop good flow I was feeling it
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12-06-03, 09:37 PM | #13 | |
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yo that was a nice Open Mic I liked the first one and and the second......nice flow....Allround Nicely Done wasn't Long Like All The Others I have read today.........But I have to say Thats a good idea Posting them sewperatly.......9/10 counting the First One too Peace Out Kuz
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12-06-03, 09:40 PM | #14 | ||
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IP:
A nice solid verse, you displayed good abilities by keeping people interested which is something important. You didn't drown yourself in emotion which is good because it becomes to personal a piece, Good drop.
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12-06-03, 10:12 PM | #15 | |
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excellent vocab and good topic
nice wordplay and rhyme scheme it represents your record .................................................. . |
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