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11-29-06, 12:51 PM | #1 | |
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Killin Shit
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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3115349
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3115360 Every time I grab a mic they say the boy is Killin~shit/ I spit a lil something to make sure ya'll is feelin~it/ If you ain't then fuck it I'll leave you bleeding~in~da~mud/ Run ya mouth I pull my nine and start feedin~you~da~slugs/ If you talk it then walk it otherwise leave~it~to~da~thugs/ Mayhem bust at anytime man cuz he~dont~give~a~fuck/ He~gone~gittem~buck, make sure the hood~stay~alive/ Piss me off and you must think todays a good~day~ta~die/ Last edited by Mayhem : 11-29-06 at 12:56 PM. |
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11-29-06, 03:17 PM | #2 | ||
Better THAN You!
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Wow. For the simplicity it was actually a straight piece.
Text Gangster Pieces don't usually work but this one kept me reading, which means there is MAD potential in this.. He~gone~gittem~buck, make sure the hood~stay~alive/ Piss me off and you must think todays a good~day~ta~die/ I like that line..Take out all the extra stuff though..like the Grave in the middle of multi's and the slash's...it kind of takes away from the effect the piece could of had..plus with a little rewording and complexity that line could be ill. Elevation is Evident. STay Up Man..keep movin.
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11-30-06, 03:40 PM | #3 | |
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Uppin for some more feedback.
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11-30-06, 03:58 PM | #4 | ||
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I liked it papi... i just wish it was a little longer you know...original.. those last 2 lines were fire though lol i liked it
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