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04-24-05, 11:12 AM | #1 | |
Peace, Love, Unity
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"Just A Moment" (Remix) Feat. Kesse
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Written to the "Just a Moment" beat.. So I figured i'd throw the chorus in.. As day comes and night falls For the rest of our life we'll miss y'all And even though life must go on, we'll still mourn While wishin' y'all were home OneStepBeyond Through life its struggle, seems difficult to survive, Result from the lies, and many had to fought for your life, thought was disguised, the truth, for you to soften the vibe, Then the truths revealed, which many times was often deprived, Some sought for a try, because first chance was taken and lost, maybe its the cost you pay, for takin and breakin ya cross, Shakin the boss for drugs, guns, sex, and alcohol and killin, i'd rather you keep it to yourself than involve the children, now they're all a victim, the future is being destroyed and, cause father, that house with his wife and kid is being avoided, And drugs and alcohol are being used just because of enjoyment, Speakin the truth, i'm speakin to you, don't try and ignore it, and for those who have been convincted, because they take dope, Or had it planted on them, being used by the media as a scapegoat, stay strong, you'll be comin home soon, and that will hit you, And for anybody whos had my back ands gone... We miss you... As day comes and night falls For the rest of our life we'll miss y'all And even though life must go on, we'll still mourn While wishin' y'all were home OneStepBeyond may we have a moment to pray, for souljahs whos slayed, some joke and they play, but may we just hope for the day, for poachers who spray to go and put those toasters away, i ain't soft, i'm jusy sayin what ya'll to bogus to say, discrimination... come on everybody knows that its gay, So i'm hopin today that my dreams won't go floatin away, i've chosen this way to live, and so i hope and i pray, that noone will say "his ways a little low don't ya say?" Kesse life is a constant storm, all things happenening in flashes too quickly it passes, tomorrow someone could be spreadin your ashes you wanna flock with the masses, just dont clip your wings so snip the strings, maybe one day we all can sip like kings cause its all in your choices, time doesnt wait patient its not the other voices that should be decidin your placement so dont stand in amazement, dont sit with your mind wondering how cause life is a constant storm...and your moment is thundering now As day comes and night falls For the rest of our life we'll miss y'all And even though life must go on, we'll still mourn While wishin' y'all were home Kesse these are the thoughts of my life, things could change in an instant still yet to mold fully, everything leaves its own imprint a soft glint in the horizon, leaving suttle hints of change everything is colors all around you, but this tint is strange it takes just a moment, and the whole world is clashing life flashing...like the ride you're on is suddenly crashing but you cant keep scratching, cause this can work two ways you can harness life's fire, or let it go up in a blaze no light shining through? gotta fight through and beat the craze you can sit back and watch or be the one the people praise its degrading, all the people content being blind than stronger thought is the greatest tool, its amazing what the mind can conquer dont hold back any longer, its all up to you if you wanna succeed their your decisions.. dont get caught up on what others believe so rise from the debris, set your mind free, and appreciate your own scent so dont tarnish what you got...cause in life, it only takes a moment.... As day comes and night falls For the rest of our life we'll miss y'all And even though life must go on, we'll still mourn While wishin' y'all were home My Feedback |
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04-24-05, 01:44 PM | #2 | |
leave you rest'n pz's
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wow this was long,...urggh,both came equal in this...
i was feeling some bars, the majority of the verses i found kinda dragged on a bit(no hate).. overall it was a decent drop.....6.5/10
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speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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04-24-05, 02:46 PM | #3 | ||
I'm a closet fag.
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word, it was kinda long eh....haha, kee up
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04-24-05, 03:10 PM | #4 | ||
in your system
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worrrd, it was kinda long, oh well......uppin, good drop OSB
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04-24-05, 05:15 PM | #5 | |
Peace, Love, Unity
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uppin...............
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04-24-05, 07:25 PM | #6 | |
Peace, Love, Unity
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uppin..................
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04-24-05, 07:44 PM | #7 | ||
New to RV
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Nice wordplay it was a little long but it was tight good visuals and story telling skills
i give it an 8 return the favor on the open mic and the battles i need some feedback also |
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04-27-05, 07:33 PM | #8 | |
Peace, Love, Unity
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uppin..................
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04-27-05, 08:40 PM | #9 | ||
~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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It was iight definatley better than your diss Kesse really the only one who got off OSB your shit was too basic but it was coo 7/10
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04-27-05, 09:08 PM | #10 | |
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Drop A Link Or This Will Be Closed
About the peice.. this was an okay piece Nice job to both , you both had nice emotions , and good imagery... Both had some nice feeling in there drop Nice drop Kesse... you had lots of emotions.. good feeling .. your wordplay was blah, elevate alittle on that One , nice drop you had some nice emotions, overall keep it up both , ..nice topic, both did a nice job, just elevate on wordplay, and vocab, and try use alittle more feeling , in your drop
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04-27-05, 09:21 PM | #11 | |
Peace, Love, Unity
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where it says My Feedback.... in the original post...
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04-28-05, 04:44 PM | #12 | ||
Metropolis
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this was pretty good, prolly coulda been cut down a lil bit tho. good imagery from both, kesse came pretty hard on this joint, i was feelin his verse alot. OSB had a nice flow and god consistency throughout the piece. this is a overall nice piece i give it a 8/10 keep doin ya thing.
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04-28-05, 07:42 PM | #13 | ||
in your system
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thank you ...
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04-30-05, 12:31 PM | #14 | ||
Banned: Cheating
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This was ight, but me and TG's just a moment was better. Ya'll onestepbehind us...maybe 2 or 3 steps, cause we did this about a month and a half ago...but still, this was a nice piece, it just didnt flow that well to me.,....
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05-01-05, 06:52 PM | #15 | ||
in your system
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word...............
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