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06-29-04, 12:29 PM | #1 | ||
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jus read!
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I have both light and dark,prohesy,death and life all imprisoned within/
I can either commit acts of kindness,or massacres of sin/ I can launch the slaughter of civilizations upon civilizations of men/ Im the monster in the closet,im the boogieman,im the wolf in the den/ Devower herds of sheap,haunt your dreams while you rest asleep/ Terror will slice through your heart to your soul,dreadfully deep/ Ill pluck and steal your mind,and forever your will i shall keep/ I will creep,i will lurk in the shadows-gracefull but devilish and unseen/ Protected,sheilded by the negative and ghastly cold sheen/ For i am a hunter,but i am also the hunted-stalked by fait/ Along with other tyrants,and for my annihalation the loom,await/ They soon will rip me limb for limb,and my flesh they will grate/ And i fear it is much to late,to reverse my future so travail/ Not even if i kneeled to God upon the holly fucking grail!/ My mission to dominate is still destined to fail,just fail.../ And i was predetermined to die-death to me is easy to apply/ My ounce golden wings have been corrupted and nolonger i fly/ Nomatter how hard i try,nomatter how much i cry..../ I suppose to society,i'll always be insignificant and gry../ And nommater how much i ask why,no answer is given/ No explanation that states why this is the way i am liven'/ Dark all around,im a soul in need of aid,never to be found/ Im fated to be placed six feet deep in ground,all before 18,its bound/ And i forsee this sickness patiently waiting around the corner/ Im growing closer,closer,warmer-fuck it im there,i best beware/ But allready im easy to scare-God,how is this fair?/ How is this fair?HOW IS THIS FAIR????????? My demise is here,its closer then close,closer then near/ It has its raised sword,prepared to clear me and my name/ Leave the blade in my chest,and steal all that i got for its claim/ And so the world will forget that i ever came!/ so am i the hunter,or the hunted?murderer or prey?/ Which side am i balanced at on this malicious fray?/ Stalked by demons every day-so am i the hunter?or prey??/ __________________ Am I the future or Am I the damned? |
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06-29-04, 12:43 PM | #2 | ||
I see dumb people
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IP:
nice shit man
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06-29-04, 02:46 PM | #3 | |
Umm...Yeah
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IP:
wow....that was nice it had a lot of emotion in that drop....... ~I.S.~
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06-29-04, 03:08 PM | #4 | |
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IP:
nice drop dog had lots of metifors
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06-30-04, 07:18 AM | #5 | ||
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IP:
thanks
uppin for feedback. |
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07-11-04, 10:45 AM | #6 | ||
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IP:
uppin this for feedback
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07-11-04, 10:51 AM | #7 | ||
poetically and justifiably sick
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IP:
good drop.fellin the emotion,like the metas,it had a nice flow 2 it....
drop a vote on dis man......im 4-0 up jus needs closin.... http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132300 |
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07-11-04, 12:08 PM | #8 | ||
New to RB
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IP:
Very good emotion to it, you was on direct wit the subject, stayed on topic, and your flow was consistent
Very nice drop |
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07-11-04, 04:15 PM | #9 | ||
bingo!
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IP:
it waas nice i was feelin it fix ur structure to get better flow
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07-18-04, 10:36 AM | #10 | ||
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IP:
uppin
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07-18-04, 11:03 AM | #11 | |
Middle Weight
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IP:
This Was Nice For Real But Let Me Drop This Up In Here
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07-18-04, 11:51 AM | #12 | ||
<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP:
This was good, you had some deep lines in there, emotional and vivid piece, i liked your use of metaphors also, i liked your last couple lines...nice way to close out.....good job...keep at it
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07-20-04, 08:54 AM | #13 | ||
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IP:
getting some good feedback from this
anymore |
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07-20-04, 11:04 AM | #14 | ||
New Jack
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IP:
I liked it your rhymes stayed consistent and you kept it even on the topic, didnt switch your style halfway through. nice drop. big ups.
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07-20-04, 05:07 PM | #15 | ||
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IP:
ok i liked everything on here, except one thing
its not just a problem with you, but a lot of people who rite without a beat or just rite down on paper, is that your lines are stretched, urs arent too bad, in my opinion they are tho, i have the opposite problem, i throw down 8 syllable lines lol |
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