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11-14-06, 09:46 PM | #1 | |
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IP:
This one was for my girl.....
I kno ive posted alot... im start leavin feed, no worries I created a world where everything's perfect I've created a place where love is still worth it No more cryin and no more searchin Love is available and broken hearts are worthless I'd love for the day to come where I take you with me For the day that everything we've been through is past in history It's too dark to travel alone through a world of mystery Hold onto my hand and I'll release your mysery Can I look in your eyes? Can I grasp your thoughts? Can we give it a try? Before it's all for not? A summer of countless wonders, nothing was bought I didn't win your love, it's a gift that you brought Do you still love me? Are you still there? I swear I do, and I still care I'm still here, and it doesn't seem fair That we go through so much, and lose the same share I can see the sunshine, but no sun in sight Fightin through clouds, a shadow of night We were alive, we were just right But now that you're gone, I've got nothing to write......
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11-15-06, 02:21 AM | #2 | |
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IP:
wow- I'm not usually one for poems about love or hate or ambivelance towards relationships.. But i gotta say that I enjoyed this peice for the essence of the uncertainty of love. Props.
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12-14-06, 02:16 PM | #3 | ||
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IP:
well, i am interested in poems of all kinds and find that love is possibly one of the most difficult things to write about because it is all that is and all that isn't and all the crap in between. I really do like ur style riccard, i appreciate the way u approached the topic as it shows how love isn't black or white. It's a phase everyone either goes thru in a relationship or goes thur after it, and i like how u mixed the end of the relationship with the end of the poem, and u having nothing left to write. It's ominous. thumbs up from me.
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