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09-29-03, 09:04 PM | #1 | |
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Varentao Vs. Understatement
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25 Lin Max Check In: Oct. 3rd Due Date:Oct. 6th Topic: The Most Beautiful Thing.. Good Luck. |
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09-29-03, 09:37 PM | #2 | |
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IP:
oh crap.
well, I'm in. this should be interesting, because, you know, I'm facing uber poetry man up in here. Last tourney you made anal sex look like waltzing with God, you crazy asshole! now I need to write against you. I will enjoy this, I hope you do too. good luck = )
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09-30-03, 07:22 PM | #3 | |
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IP:
On another point. I don't want to clog up this thread. Then again, it is our thread.
The anal sex thing. Too many people got the wrong idea when they read that. They didn't seem to get it. It was an integral part of what was being explained. Put in relatively 'normal' thought/situation. I guess it roughly epitomised what was being depicted...it wasn't just about titilation and what not. Though that was a substantial factor to add to the effect, like.... Er, yeah, just thought i'd clear that up. Though i'm sure no one cares. |
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10-03-03, 11:37 AM | #4 | ||
Special Ghost To Blow
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Waiting to see some wonderful displays of skill.......................
Best of luck to both of you amazing lyricists............................. .................................................. ............................................... |
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10-04-03, 02:17 AM | #5 | ||
Atra Ludio or Hip-Hop?
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IP:
Don't judge it till you've tried it. Having anal sex while waltzing with God happens to feel great.
You're right, varentao, nobody does care. Except me of course cause I'm special. And finally, if you need help on the subject "The Most Beautiful Thing.." then you just have to look no further then me of course. 'Cause I'm just that damn good. And uh... yeah... I'm waiting too. |
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10-06-03, 11:52 PM | #6 | |
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theres no use in being civil to the beautiful things
when good triumphs over evil on a vampire's wings and no time for alliance with heavenly blessings because society is reliant on happiness they bring eyelids are spread wide drinking in all the light the shorebound sit aside for power lies in flight above clouds, below ground places where cold's found frictional heat is profound moaning without a sound we are all alone together, twin fetuses grow apart 1000 lbs of feathers will crush the strongest heart and yet in this simplicity it is easier for me to breath single in my duplicity, harder for Layman to conceive impossibilities reach high, from the ant hills there it's difficult to deny, when I must grin and bear the beauty that confronts, all underneath the sun acrimonious and blunt, all I want is to be one with it, and all it is, and everything that I wanted metaphoric bliss, only the heart and mind responded start the binding grips, before it leaves your lips Jack Frost begins to nip, numbed by his Acid Trips even winter is affected by the harmonious night black stallions defected, sick of all and every slight appalled in every light, to tell their foreign tale you can have my sight, but my soul is not for sale Her Beauty Passed Me By, And I Forgot To Even Try werd up, varenizzle! (oh God I'm tired)
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10-07-03, 12:16 AM | #7 | |
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The Most Beautiful Thing: Complex Beauty
Watching summer caught by winds Grey clouds shroud mysterious ways Biting cold strangles to epic surrender Tearful rain breaks stormy screams Melodic murmurs boil senses red Yellow crimes haze battle weary minds Poverty grips green grind’s growing circle Riveting blues play nights away Old wise tramp kisses cool cracked concrete Devouring butter fried bread in sweet misery Distant city lights becomes temporal stars Desperation stirs stimulated death to reality Moonlit sky drives dense rhythmic air Floating memories help mould unholy wisdom Frozen eyes thawed by echoing varied cries Abstract beauty form my visions of heaven Heh. Both on sailing near the edge, eh? Big up, understamentinizz...*rolls eyes*... |
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10-07-03, 02:04 AM | #8 | ||
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IP:
nice stuff guys. madd complexity and dept felt in both peices. im kinda thrown back on how to vote cause ya topic is unraveled in itself, but 2 break stuff down. V ya veres were justice foe the topic. i honestly sat back and was able to visuliaze the scenery aka the complex beauty in ya wordplay. the last bar finished like icein on the cake, Great Stuff. now U ya verse was deeper then most bottomless pits. just complexs point of view thats just kept going. i really felt lost threw the peice. like ya ant hill meta flew way over my head. Yet, i kinda thought that was ya intent do to becuase of the topic, but i dunno. so like i stated before kinda hard to chose a staright answer from complex peices, but only
the judges can make the decisions here... peAce 2 b0th of ya's Last edited by Content : 10-07-03 at 09:12 AM. |
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10-07-03, 12:25 PM | #9 | ||
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IP:
is she suppose to be voting lol or do i just not get who she is.....
gege may i vote ( IF THIS DOESNT COUNT -O-WELL- LOL) UNDERSTATEMENT theres no use in being civil to the beautiful things when good triumphs over evil on a vampire's wings ^^ i thought the usage of vampires wings really gave this an eary essense as if your taking the most beautiful thing and making it evil and good triumphing over evil is what we all hope for but rarely recive and no time for alliance with heavenly blessings because society is reliant on happiness they bring you kno that i so true and i belive thats why most people become DEPRESSEd is because they always hope for it all and never recive nearly as much happiness as they wold have hoped to we as people rely to much on society to alter our feelings eyelids are spread wide drinking in all the light the shorebound sit aside for power lies in flight your simple ryhme scheme come sin handy in this peice it makes it easy for the reader to get on the poetic vibe and follow through without having to stumble trip and spill saliva over big words that you arnt really sure if they ryhme or not ( not that all poetry ryhmes lol Look at myne) above clouds, below ground places where cold's found frictional heat is profound moaning without a sound for some reason this was SUPPOSE to paint a picture but it didnt for me i was to busy trying to visualize it that i got lost in its context we are all alone together, twin fetuses grow apart 1000 lbs of feathers will crush the strongest heart WOW that was great the comparison with feathers KNOWING that 1000lbs would be SO FREAKIN many feathers wow I LOVED THAT that right there was so exellent the visual of it ....great and yet in this simplicity it is easier for me to breath single in my duplicity, harder for Layman to conceive i belive that this part may throw some readers off not knowing the layman terms and teh SINGLE in DUPLICITY was a great usuage of terms there ...im so amazed impossibilities reach high, from the ant hills there it's difficult to deny, when I must grin and bear BEAR in that from as the animal is great because of your refernce to ANTs as well you could have used BARE and had the same emaning but not the same UNIQUNESS great again the beauty that confronts, all underneath the sun acrimonious and blunt, all I want is to be one had to use the dictionary on that word but after finding the meaning i was shocked at your greatness once again that word added just enough complexity to your poem to make it a little edgy with it, and all it is, and everything that I wanted metaphoric bliss, only the heart and mind responded THAT truly is the most beautiful thing start the binding grips, before it leaves your lips Jack Frost begins to nip, numbed by his Acid Trips i belive that when you put in acid trips it took us off the LOVEY dovery vibe and placed us off track a little bit perhaps too much of the wrong type of vibe even winter is affected by the harmonious night black stallions defected, sick of all and every slight black stallions great imagry and i belive horses are truly beautiful so that related to me and made me appreciate this even more appalled in every light, to tell their foreign tale you can have my sight, but my soul is not for sale and it shouldnt be...for a soul beutiful enough to write a poem like this is surly one that will never go up for sale no matter the price offered Her Beauty Passed Me By, And I Forgot To Even Try forgot to try seemed a bit off to me if your entrapped in her beauty yes it wold fit...but if your only at the point where you'r stuck but could still get away ( which is what i got ) then perhpas you would try...personal op of course this was a great peice a beautiful ( but not easy ) topic and you wrote so damn well varentago: The Most Beautiful Thing: Complex Beauty you giving us your extension of teh topic *complexx beauty* sets teh stage and puts us right on track without even having to read any further i appreciate that Watching summer caught by winds Grey clouds shroud mysterious ways Biting cold strangles to epic surrender Tearful rain breaks stormy screams IT is rainging here in pendleton (where i am) and this made me shiver i looked out the wondow and what did i see Grey clouds and thunder n lightning I AM REALLY in the MOOD for this peice and that is so very true Melodic murmurs boil senses red Yellow crimes haze battle weary minds Poverty grips green grind’s growing circle Riveting blues play nights away HAZE eh? greens , reds, greys, blues, your following of the color cheme is truly poetic in that we KNOW theses colors WE have ALL seen them we can there for relate to your poem in the snes that YES I HAVE SEEN THAT I KNOW WHAT IT LOOKS LIKE feel me? truly great V Old wise tramp kisses cool cracked concrete Devouring butter fried bread in sweet misery Distant city lights becomes temporal stars Desperation stirs stimulated death to reality the D starting makes you prouncouete the first word of each sentence and say the formation of D there for giving this stanza a WOW powerful impact Moonlit sky drives dense rhythmic air Floating memories help mould unholy wisdom Frozen eyes thawed by echoing varied cries Abstract beauty form my visions of heaven heaven to me is not a beautiful thing i belive it is a thing of betrayel and false belief....and i wish someday that it will change for me..... the echoing cries part i read right as thunder hit and it made me once again shudder you are such a great poet and i appreciate you and your work to the fullest extent of my poetic being ON the topic of voting it is truly hard for me and it saddnes me to think i have to choose then again I PRIDE MY SEL FIn being able to read these great poems my honest opinion in the giving the topic understatement rose above and conqured the topic to a point wher ei have not seen better varentago you are in deed one of ym favorites poets this is true but in this battle i belive unda won *hope i could aid in the terror of voting gege* Heh. Both on sailing near the edge, eh? |
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10-07-03, 06:56 PM | #10 | |
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"Heaven is not the most beautiful thing.."..exactly, one of the points of the piece. But heaven was a common link. Hence the 'my heaven'. Thanks for digging, hazy. Complex Beauty is the title. A quick one.
Appreciate the honesty. (though its Varentao, no g!). Last edited by varentao : 10-07-03 at 10:25 PM. |
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10-07-03, 07:44 PM | #11 | |
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IP:
^lol @varentago
Yes, Hazy..I will count your vote, since it was so in depth and i haven't seen Shiz around in a while..Im gonna take the judges i can get..while i still got em...But if youre gonna vote on this one, how about Preacher vs. Content? 1-0 in Unda's favor. I'll vote on this in a few.. |
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10-07-03, 09:28 PM | #12 | ||
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sorry to freepost on this but hazy will probaly
judge whats easier to read...which is my opponents.. my words come from my fuckin heart and arent just fancied in a way to make it sound good..its all for a reason and makes perfect sense.....good judges would be the following for the remainder of this.. Gege..hazy didnt even spell you name right.... Camarac Shiznit Deacon Last edited by Content : 10-07-03 at 09:31 PM. |
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10-07-03, 09:47 PM | #13 | ||
I Am The Light
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i'd be glad to judge.....but this has been an ultra strange tourney....people leaving...not agreeing.haha its a mess....welll if so ill post my words tomorrow regaurdless if it counts..
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10-07-03, 10:44 PM | #14 | ||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP:
I liked both pieces, however due to my lack of a friendship with poetic overlord GeGe i shan't vote or even allow my opinion to be released so that i dont sway any judges but good job to both...FREEDOM OF SPEACH FUCKAHS!!! 1luv.
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10-08-03, 03:19 AM | #15 | ||
Tampons are expensive
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IP:
Not posting and replying to poems and open mics for a while because of me trying to get really serious with my life (including my future with my special someone ) and enjoying the fondness of growing money from the palm of my hand and sweat from its roots?
Yes... but...MIA??...uhh...i have been here...jst checkin rb once in awhile...i am not quite sure if you guys still wanted me to judge though...i mean dont you already have all the help you can get? ..and yeah i think u might be true on your words Da Nfamous. Deacon is a very intelligent human being but that doesnt mean i cant sing "Smelly Cat" ... Go FIgure. But the tournament has been doing really great (Thanks to Gege and the people helping her) and i was glad i did get to experience being a participant and a judge as well. Good luck again guys to the Final Round.
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