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Old 05-01-05, 02:02 PM   #1
Cri$$tyle
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From: WESTSIDE, Cali-fo!
freestyle untraceble diss

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Cassidy beat

from- 'Hard Knock disses Mixtape Vol 1'



Letz get " this kid..he ducking me like crazy



This kid aint ready for me like creatures God didnt put into a 'race',
i have this kid out of place- like tha 'lost city' and leave him finished just
like a closed case,
This kid couldnt match to my flow like bitches having wrong dates,

^^^^it's nuttin

You can't 'cum' hard like a dick with no balls...i break all your bones like a game with no rules*
i have your body parts missing like shop lifting- and have you served like chickens on 'Thankz giving',
- i get 'thankz given' when your having spanks given-
i leave you laying dead like a gold fish when it has it's tank missing,
and my bullets leave your mouth open like 'french kissing'...
shells reach you at any place like emails-leaving ur ass more bloody than miss-carriaged females
Your a miss-fit like fat joe wearing ja-rules underwear...haha...Nuff said shall i go on? i got like a few more barz it's nothing

Test me i'll wear you out like Nike sneakers- and you can't speak the truth when you rap like Unbelievers*

you couldn't hold weight even if you picked up a mic!!!
i stay holding it down like last night with your wife,
tha only thing 'tight' about you are those jeans your wearing,
your another gay rapper clone- like the gene yall sharing
the only way you spit 'hot' is when i burn your mouth...and like a steering weel bitch i turn you out,
the only way your seen spitting is when tha sperm is out

i blow your back out with sheffles till they stick out your chest like nipples
just like mountain climbing BITCH you couldnt reach to my level....

bitch...cri$$tyle...you know how it is..WESTSIDE...Nuff said




i'll break all your bones like a game with no rules*

^^ a game with no rules is like a game with broken rules


and you can't speak the truth when you rap like Unbelievers*

^^ Unbelievers= people who dont believe in God, dont believe in tha truth

Last edited by Cri$$tyle : 05-01-05 at 02:23 PM.
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Old 05-01-05, 02:07 PM   #2
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this is nuttin man...i got tha flue so i aint even gotta try

itz Nothing..freestyle

do yo thang
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Old 05-01-05, 02:10 PM   #3
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Lol... Trace doesn't even get on...
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Old 05-01-05, 02:13 PM   #4
Cri$$tyle
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.....Like a dick through a broken condom

haha lol i used the last thing you said to make ANOTHER bar
this is just too easy for me man
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Old 05-03-05, 06:01 PM   #5
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Originally Posted by Cri$$tyle
.....Like a dick through a broken condom

haha lol i used the last thing you said to make ANOTHER bar
this is just too easy for me man



that was pretty whack...along wit this track lol...
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Old 05-03-05, 07:11 AM   #6
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Old 05-03-05, 11:53 AM   #7
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Old 05-03-05, 11:57 AM   #8
Cri$$tyle
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Mutherfuckaz sleeping !!!
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Old 05-03-05, 12:09 PM   #9
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man ya structure is fucked...but its still a iight diss...7/10 for dis...peep my OM...first link in sig

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Old 05-03-05, 12:31 PM   #10
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lmao you said it for me, my structure's retarded
i'll check out your stuff
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Old 05-03-05, 12:50 PM   #11
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Old 05-03-05, 02:59 PM   #12
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Some Aight Punches, Similes, And Meta4's, Aight Flow, Some Stuff Was A Little Simple Though, But This Was An Ok Piece~
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Old 05-03-05, 03:30 PM   #13
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This could have used alot of work before your dropped it
You could have fixed up your structure alot, made it easier for the reader to read your
peice...Next you could have used better wordplay and vocab,
Punchlines were iight , pretty much most of them were played out..
And have been used before... Multies were okay alittle here and there..
I felt you could have used alittle more mutlies , and even out your bars..
Made the reader not want to read this drop because it was
so disorganized... Overall this was an iight Freestyle, could have been alot better
next time try to edit your structure , and use mroe direct punchlines
and hard personals ,

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Old 05-03-05, 03:34 PM   #14
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ur structure is as doe said...I like the way u flowed though...it's not usually what I hear so it was different...the punches was aiight too...I think u chewed the cat...but then again I haven't heard his side...

ps.. return the favour yo...and read "MY ABC's"

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=188113
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Old 05-04-05, 08:09 AM   #15
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^I'd like to see you do better then...'hater'

Thankz for the feedback people ima work on this bitch like ah muther...

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