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07-13-05, 02:08 AM | #1 | ||
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Ink Across the Emotion
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ink across this. the guidance i take is the past i'd love to hide memories with each letter. a written expression as my pen holds a solitary glide the choice of words are more than what we could fake i wish we could have counted the days, focus on me and you more instead of trying to find a cure. to what we couldn't mend. ignoring all that said by your friends, trying to find the reason behind all of this again playing off of the moment and trying to grasp is to much for me to comprehend , it was heaven sent still looking to the ground as if to find an answer. but only seeing broken pieces as the sweat releases and the emotion slowly but surely increases racing thoughts we were on the last leg of the marathon and we couldn't carry on now I'm here standing here alone while your nothing but withdrawn and gone the cancer of this logic seems to collide with my heart its the best no its isn't as it slowly but surely tears me apart so give me a subtle burning kiss. of brutal reality the brutality of the instance was cursed by your sexuality so with the questions .... came the response.... the answer bounced off your tongue and ran through your lips as though to finish it quick , making sure to save my pride while i watched the remains of what we had whisk away and die so now with every word comes a memory trying to run from a past that seems to hold me havent written for a while just not feeling like it.. but i wrote this anyways sorry if it seems forced...werd
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07-13-05, 06:55 AM | #2 | |
Poet's Daughter.
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IP:
^^ And You are correct about "Force"...I'm liking the imagery, not looking the approach. Hmmm the concept could be better. Emotion, elevate on that. Vocab needs to be a upp, words is basic. I kept re-reading, and re-reading, and I couldnt get what your trying to say. Please explain. but over-all ok drop, just write more.
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