Ayo im walking a mountain but struggling from the altitude
shit walking on da edge can really take it out of you....
Im like eyedea coz its obvious that I got the ability
to spit n sustain, just I aint got the right facilities
Still im "building" on it wit my agillity to deliver these
poisitive messages, discussing concussion n miserys
like the percussions n obstructions of having no electricity
In a lonely sanctum where no soul can visit me......
pissed so I litter beats n shit on geeks quite bitterly
17 years old, similiar to a turtle, coming outta ma shell
I can't breath without air so how am I supposed to excell
n expell all the negative imagery thats seen n portrayed
I smile with no lips n just pretent to be amazed.......
My futures a ball n it can roll in any particular direction
where do I go is the question??...failure is no acception
bewildered thoughts continue to grip n arrest ma protection
A confused brain with illusion of pain when im distraught
Where do I go??..crime or success...which path do i walk??

I can't believe you haven't gotten any feedback yet because this was a nice drop. I am definitely feeling the topic you are handling here and how you worked it out. It's packed with emotion and I like the way how you worded everything, for instance:

"My futures a ball n it can roll in any particular direction"

"17 years old, similiar to a turtle, coming outta ma shell"

Your vocab was outstanding in my opinion because you kept a nice balance between complex and basic, it was easy to read and yet didn't come off as elementary. You had your flow on lock because of good multis, nice rhyming and such. I also think it's easy for many of us to relate to because of the subject you picked...

Good drop!

DQ

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^^^and dat was from tha sexiest chick on RV...truth

yeah...like DQ said, dis was tight...vocab, structure, everythang...on point fam...9/10 cuz i felt it...stay up

-DB

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ok upping this.............................................. ..........

thx for feed......appreciate it................................................ ...

shit this was wack

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as wack as u r mum u lil faggot, go make a thread on how u need 2 elevate or summin............................................ ...............uppin

as wack as u r mum u lil faggot, go make a thread on how u need 2 elevate or summin............................................ ...............uppin

omg cmon dont ya'll know a decent drop when you see one?? you prolly just read the 1st line n assume its wack, cmon gimme some feedback, ive upped it like 5 times and i personally know it aint wack so wos da deal?? this sites starting to die off I swear.

ayo up this its like one of my pieces from ages ago but i like it....uppin