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09-02-06, 02:30 AM | #1 | |
oh yea?
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We Change Things
IP:
(My RSTL Verse for this week)
“They always say time changes things, but you actually have to change them yourself.” - Andy Warhol People these days are blind, they’re ungrateful waste of lives Cause the fate of mine was to change the face of time But rumors say I was just tired, and now no one’s telling facts Like I would choose to rest, just to go to hell and back? So if you fell for that, you’re more than just a tad stupid I passed through it for a cause, the effect I had proves it See, tired of bearing discrimination and being told I’m weak I decided to hold my seat, Now I’m the chairman of a nation I’m Rosa Parks, known as sweet, the one we became equal through But don’t take my kindness for weakness, I have an ego too I didn’t just sit down that day, I sat on racism’s face And all this talk makes me irate, nothing could have taken its place I would leave people in the dark, but there’s a guy I know that’s bright His name’s Pat and he made a time machine that will show I’m right And help me go through these nights, once I prove people wrong I go inside it with fright, yet ready for moving along Set for whatever my quest is, I push a button in the back Seconds later I’m stuck in the past, like I never had pressed it It’s the day I didn’t give up my seat, which kind of comforts me But I’m still the same age, so I run to find the younger me While thinking I’m too late I see her on a bus line through gates The bus arrives late today, but there’ll be no time to waste Even less to focus with, but somehow I easily cope with it And leave her shoe laces in a knot without her noticing Which was not arranged, the bus comes & my clone went on her way She takes a couple of steps forward and falls flat on her face Then gets up after the bus leaves, it’s clear my aim’s done I use the machine to return to where I came from I’m back now and everything changed, stuff is getting real strange Pat’s house has slaves, and he’s acting crazy, his head is deranged I’m hiding from him, cause he has a nine and he’s coming My heart’s jumping, as “n!gger, n!gger” he just starts humming Then Pat asks for his Grey Poupon and a slave responds We thought there’d be change we saw, but from that this is way beyond The slave approaches me saying that I have to free her And that blacks became slaves again due to lack of leaders Cause Malcolm and Martin lost their following and their lives Shortly after I was to get on the bus and scare whites Then she said “we’re the worst race”, & in her voice I heard pain All of this reminds me why I did what I did in the first place When I would thirst change, It’s time for me to go back in time Fix things so that being black is fine, get things back in line So I walk in the time machine, but something gets into me Blood drips as I push the button, Pat gave me an injury I’m in the past again, only this time with a lack of wind And the strength I have left is from emotions packed within Plus soon I’m gonna die, cause Pat shot a lung of mine But I wont stop breathing ‘til I go back to what was of time Thanks to luck I’m fine, this time the plan is easy to finish I’ll see the me that came last time in a measly two minutes And that’s what happened as my seconds became even fewer The other me fixed things while I’m on my way to the future I get back and everything’s fine, except I’m about to die I wont be around tonight, but out of joy I’m still bound to cry As blood & tears drip on the floor, I smile at what others take me for Knowing that if people knew what I know they’d appreciate me more
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09-02-06, 02:31 AM | #2 | |
oh yea?
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IP:
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2882803
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2882806
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Last edited by David Lama : 09-02-06 at 11:30 AM. |
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09-02-06, 04:01 AM | #3 | |
Whys That?
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IP:
Very impressed. You better hope you get those links up otherwise you will loose the featured open mic spot.
Congrats bro. |
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09-02-06, 07:36 PM | #4 | ||
New to RV
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IP:
Dope. The flow of this was on point, brought along with a lot of multisyllable inner strings, mixed a lot of emotion, and complex storylines.. this was dope. The syllable count in the lines were basically perfect, man. this is a very very nice piece, without any forced lines either.
good job. hit up Tomborrow
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09-21-06, 02:24 PM | #5 | ||
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IP:
Man this was fuckin dope but you need to like proofread to make sure the flow is gonna be on point. Like in the first line, take out "they're" and its perfect... but still dope good job.
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10-09-06, 08:28 PM | #6 | ||
++ON TOP++
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IP:
i was feel this drop alot shawty, you came on some real talk, the flow was on point and you had some good multies in there. the only thing i would suggest is to seperate the drop into more than just one long verse.
Plus soon I’m gonna die, cause Pat shot a lung of mine But I wont stop breathing ‘til I go back to what was of time That was one of my favorite bars hit me up on my joints....................be easy |
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