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Old 09-16-06, 12:09 PM   #1
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New Song: My Love N' Life By: $Duce$

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Old 09-16-06, 02:51 PM   #2
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Quality is weird. I hear the static in the back..Sounds bad..how is this album quality?...

Flow is off at times..The double vocal's don't fit right...You chose the wrong times to do those..and they are off a little..the flow again isn't right, it fits the beat, but it doest fit your voice...like you forced the whole track..tryna speed it up a little...

Chorus - Was actually okay, not the best... It could be WAY better, but it's not the worst I ever heard...

damn man..fix that flow...man...work on it all..it's pretty basic...nothing real special about the track...simple rhymes and scheme..nothing really your own..

oh and your SC- Pictuer/Album cover..whatever it is..is ass...sorry..

work on it.
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Old 09-16-06, 03:33 PM   #3
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Static aint a good thing - specially for an album - qual gota be hot...

Flow is off because ure packing too many words in...your multi use is decent...

delivery will get better as soon as u get more experience..

keep working it out...basi cally work on everything....nah mean..

but keep dropping..

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Old 09-18-06, 02:53 PM   #4
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i anit got tha much scrilla so ma quality is horrible bruh.. I unno bout that album cover i think its fire.. my album will be done in a full-studio no doubts.. there jus small samples.. only reason its bad is my 2$ mic tha static comes in my words are hard to hear... no hate appricate tha comments actual tells me to keep improvin..
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Old 09-18-06, 04:29 PM   #5
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Sound like paranoid. lol.

Flow isnt natural, your struggling to spit your lyrics or either reading it straight off the paper.

With yoru dubs, add more emotion to it , the reason for dubs is to switch it up from the actual verse.

Your emotion sucks, its just plain ass.

Your content is generic bullshit, I could see you getting better if you are willing to listen to feedback, but I get the feeling you one a those kdis who considers himself allready dope, so wont be willing to listen to constructive crit.


Overall this isnt good, its sucks really.
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Old 09-18-06, 04:42 PM   #6
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Honestly, quality is bad, but thats not it. It's you. you have no emotion with your words. I can tell your reading.....plus the silly doub at the end of every line is annoyin as shit.

You can tell this probly sounded dope in your head, but your mouth aint as talented as your imagination.
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Old 09-19-06, 09:13 AM   #7
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Rofl, CJ ur not that good either, I take feedback into good consid... always room for improvment i dont think im dope i look at what ever doesnt kill you makes u stronger, the dubs is jus sumthin i was tryin..
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Old 09-19-06, 11:43 AM   #8
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Flow is off majorly off nothing special is spitted find a flow and also find a topic cause if it about your baby then talk about your baby in more then the hook cause the track wasnt about your girl
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Old 09-19-06, 12:16 PM   #9
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yeah flow was off everyline.......u cramin way too much in one line.......dubs sound fucking stupid.......considering there off..........u need to werk on flow delevery emotion pretty much everything...........and c jet has way more skiill than this......
4/10 an u only get that cause i dont feel likebeing a prick.....i did enough of that in my verse against you
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Old 09-19-06, 01:30 PM   #10
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u got a half jour to post ya verse or you l;oooooooooooooooseeeeeeeee
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Old 09-19-06, 03:59 PM   #11
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eh man...that cover is sloppy as hell. The render isn't appealing and the brushign is ASSSS! plus the text is to simple and the Sticker on it sticks out to much..which makes it look bad..sorry..try again.
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Old 09-19-06, 05:24 PM   #12
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u got potential.......work on that flow first off though
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