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12-21-03, 03:25 PM | #1 | |
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Raw Spittage Pt.2
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Lonliness ft Edicius My Rage-Bio Chemist Liba Dee Ayo... Just Some shyt... I'm makin it up as i go I flip words schemes like twisted abdominal muscles being torn thru ligament damage// take ripped spleens add bread an eat a snadwich made from collilaterailly brain's hammered// my anterior cause those to think,foe's to loose sight when they blink// fuck whose's right what i speak with have blood pouring out ya pores down the sink// i'am crazy...life is my pill like "pink"......// on this rap shit i commense to pull an "o.d"...maybe one day MD will be respected with the real o.g's// living life righteous with 100 isreal's with foot long goatee's// i flow consistant..end to end i leave minds boggeled an stabled with knowledgable facts// more than street basic's like chrome 20's an mach// pimp's an the bitch's their known to smack// hoes that fucked up the game an done blown to crack// homo's get it correct,my vocab an frame flame explosive with deadly wordplay// that switch with the antic's foul enough to turn a grown man gay// reconstuction the "i don't give a fuck" in you an crew alike// alive,i adapt to the bullshit,an attack at nite// works of art,are my hearts from heart// poision darts....// my body stay's cold with ahte an dreams of date-rapes// throwing lightning bolts at 2000 great apes// my crusades to create a flow more loved than kool-aid// i stay ghetto..hell it's all i know..never stay mello// on street corners with coke defendents...jumpy....in cars with a heavy foot on pedals// quick key..see me...interruption of timeless time// cats confront me with rhymeless rhymes// flowless flows,wordless words....but i continue with flawless flaws// that end up wiring lieing an fractured jaws// MD spit's illness like i just kissed magic johnson an 10 other A.I.D.S patient's waiting for death// i leave cats waiting to inhale after they mistakenly exhaled what was they insecuratable breath// leavin Cats like Australins saying Caesar On3 |
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12-21-03, 05:32 PM | #2 | ||
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first thing,,,wher'd ya learn to spell....lol....some nice vocab...what wasnt made up...couldnt really make out a clear topic....try and stay clear on what ya saying......but for it been key'd in while written...cant really say much...pZ
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12-21-03, 05:35 PM | #3 | |
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Damn and i thought this piece would get a LIL feed back... uppin
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12-22-03, 03:18 PM | #4 | |
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Didn't think i would be gettin slept on like this.... and there was no real specific topic... i was just chasin lines...
UPPIN... I GIVE FEED... BUT DON'T RECIEVE???? dats fawl |
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12-22-03, 03:22 PM | #5 | |
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I liked your vocab but your structure sucks. You need to make it easier for us to read somehow. But it was an okay drop.
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12-22-03, 03:56 PM | #6 | ||
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...your wordplay was very nice...but like ^said because of the structure it was kind of hard to follw...it doesn't mean this wasn't a nice piece...
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12-22-03, 06:39 PM | #7 | |
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come yall don't sleep uppin
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12-23-03, 10:08 AM | #8 | |
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fuck it... cats don't wanna show love... ha... tricks
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12-23-03, 11:50 AM | #9 | ||
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welp dawg
STructure and technique was fresh as hell and your vocab is good but it could need a fresh up like mine lol
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12-23-03, 11:51 AM | #10 | ||
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juss keep working
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