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03-06-09, 11:07 AM | #1 | ||
text.even geico can do it
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Amulet
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Amulet of Immortality
"ayo! whats good son? come here.. theres this story I heard.. of a crazy set of diamonds, and whoever grabs it is said to be granted life after death..." [gun switch] "I'm looking for the amulet!" [long silence] .. ... "so you are.." Bobericc sparkling dark, I found it under fossils of lost- souls, formally known as apostles of god's stones.. whatever's not known, is soon to be, jewelry's stripped like nudity.. Immunity; in tune with me my cue to leave, the deepest catacomb, killer caverns boulders triggered, passing over skilled assassins quick with balance, hassled as arrows catapulted past my shoulders, and a narrow passage opened ..so with a hop skip and a jump, slid with my run 2 walls stiffened to one, the rock hit with a thump I witnessed whats done, unruly acts of hideous apes so many booby traps, not even your titties are safe never at an idiots pace, I evade the unimagined the dumbest fuckers action, crusading and multitasking we're caved in, fully blasted.. so try and take it its tied behind my minds bind, your lies are aimless intertwining hatred.. unaccepted to support the legacy an immortal you'll never be, I'll ensure your entropy life's falling short and ending weak, for doubting the pen I use when I have an hour to spend from my overpowering gem how'd you intend to find my spirit, I had to dive in missions, and you've never found the hieroglyphics in the wide pacifics my timeless wishes are too complicated, if your concentrated with unfocused emotions, shocked and baited.. my brain is operated... by different sparks of Satan, metamorphize by the light of god in placement, deaths of pure shine bright souls are collected cures.. my eyes dry and diluted loose I am a saluted man to the jewel of truth, pool of youth how'd you get the clues you knew? I need to know your source 'cause you know my source, its turned me into a soulless force the coldness courses, crossed into my almost-cyber diatreme that learns to hide it's dryer heave, fuck what liars try to be fuck what liars try to see, time is the weakest link a reapers dream, it seems to me, the future's seen you bleed ..hahahaahaaa... [long silence] [multiple shots let off] Chronos I seen the future! I come through with the heim and shootcha more smoke than fiends and hookahs, you know we bring bazookas your dreams are useless, you really think your a profit? I blast and swing till I got it, leave what your dropping I'm taking the amulet, ulti-mate fate in a manuscript reading the souls, they transmitting into tantrum's and forever management, I take it, America, than the world I can be your oyster, you can be my pearl, I told you now I hold you down, like the gun in my holster, the shotty under my shoulders, pull it and i'm dumping to roast ya' dispose ya bones like its kosher, eating your wack raps just a lab rat in this habitat, my perspective's past ya ass your an invented parallax trying to see me, pretending it the source thats gotten me my philosophy's awareness in emptiness your a scared bitch, its apparent i'm fearless.. ignipotent omnipotent, heaven sent...... from hell and in again! proving sense with vigilance, filled with sins, sickening I'll leave you entering an island to die in like Gilligan dividing the triangular pyramid, all angle's extravagant where the mind is divine like Allah but not benevolent i'm inconsiderate, don't give a shit.. not even a little bit flip ya lid, see whats inside ya head, and spark your interest as it intersects the balance of Hindu, observing it for later like Vishnu, sustaining my brain in preserving the pervader, concerning the earths creater, the demigod, demiurge, the semi splurge, I let it pop. your getting shot, i'm ending yours. this reoccurrence reoccurs.. *rips amulet from bobericc's neck* "I told you, I'll outlive time itself!" and as chronos starts walking away, bob gets shot in his face but what chro didn't know, he got what he takes.. an obvious fake bob reaches to his pocket and waits, as the bullet wound undo's the true grudged jewel, grabs the duce duce, and shoots guns too loaded pistols, chronos riddled by the morality of immortality turns around 'cause he heard a sound, long living more jealousy a heavy breathe, both clearly blast, bob has his healing factor hit chronos in his shoulder, and jumped through the ceiling after.. "noooo... the amulet!!.." |
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03-06-09, 11:08 AM | #2 | ||
text.even geico can do it
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=249369
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=249057 LOL i know its long as shit, but please read. crazy Ill |
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03-08-09, 09:21 AM | #3 | |
Herb
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DOPE concept guys, i really liked this as a topic and you both laced with imagery and great storytelling about the amulet and your collective quest to get it. The twist at the end was a great finisher, the rhyme scheme was strong in bob's verse, functional in choronos'. I think you both went off a tangent's once or twice when you should've been cracking on with the story but it held by attention despite the length of the piece. A topical gem gentlemen. Good work.
Keep posting, cheers for the rep bob. |
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03-08-09, 11:56 AM | #4 | ||
text.even geico can do it
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chronos is me lol... alias
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03-10-09, 12:26 AM | #5 | |
Addicted
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hella long read danm i think i took a time out drunk a beer... read some more... drunk another beer by the time i was done wit that i had ran throu apack or corona's but it was well worth it... bobur flow was on point also chronos you both stood on tpic very well and was very impressed that even thou it took me forever to read i was still entertain that is why i had to keep reading it lol... the object of chaseing the amult was aight but you ade it intresting honestly u had to have an open mind for ths kind of topic and im amazed on how you did it... i think concord verse was better then again not you to pretty much even but i felt it more not o take noting away from bob...
overal all hella read also hell along.... 10/10 simply perfect... Last edited by MurDaH187 : 03-10-09 at 12:29 AM. |
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03-10-09, 12:30 AM | #6 | |
Addicted
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*rips amulet from bobericc's neck*
"I told you, I'll outlive time itself!" and as chronos starts walking away, bob gets shot in his face but what chro didn't know, he got what he takes.. an obvious fake bob reaches to his pocket and waits, as the bullet wound undo's the true grudged jewel, grabs the duce duce, and shoots guns too loaded pistols, chronos riddled by the morality of immortality turns around 'cause he heard a sound, long living more jealousy a heavy breathe, both clearly blast, bob has his healing factor hit chronos in his shoulder, and jumped through the ceiling after.. "noooo... the amulet!!.." fav part plus nice twist.... |
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03-17-09, 02:27 AM | #7 | |
New Jack
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I like this man. The imagery is off the chains. The flow is great. It really paints a picture. Great story telling. The concept is top notch. Very good work man.
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