ahyo these trick ass bitches always ridin my dick-
i wanna hit it and quit it, they gotta start up some shit-
its like every one ive done is always hatin on the one-
whateva happened to mackin and just havin a lil fun-
I know they love me-
I know they feelin it now-
they like the way I put it down and they wanna know how-
I make em feel so real, on the way to the hotel-
lay em on they back and now im wrokin it so well-
da games there, you just gotta play by the rules-
And I wont rush into love ma' thats only for fools-
And Im not the type of man thats gonna blow up ya phone-
id rather sit in my crib and count my money alone-
so if you causin mad drama mama- (i aint got time)
Got me dealin wit these fakes that fuckin-(think they can rhyme)
So keep in mind, everytime -(ya put ya life on the line)
Ill be sexin bad bitches -(bumpin city is mine)....ya heard

"Chorus"

back in the day we was walkin hand and hand in the mall-
i used to buy shorty every lil thing that she saw-
cause i like to see ya smile
and i like to drop a thou'
and i like the fact that bitches-
would fight to hold me down-
i still think about the times we was layin in bed-
and we'd laugh about the freaky lil things that you said-
and you loved the fact that i could rap and put out ya back-
we both know you never thought a cat could work it like that-
but than in time ya mind started showin its true roots-
you didnt like the shorties tellin me i was cute-
than you got all jealous thoughts thought i was out hittin ass-
when i was really in the studio workin on raps-
yo when started writin i was dreamin of fame-
i wasnt layin no tracks but yo i still ran train-
and now the chedda is better so bitches givin me brain-
bumpin scotts 2 shots a henny yo im livin da game- ...cmon

chorus (2)

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This wasn't that good...I didn't feel this at all..

It was pretty whack with flow and your vocab was non exsistant...

and that moma dama line...reminded me of mary J's song...

Hope it ain't a bite..

Keep Elevatin.

Peace

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read the rules, was not aware of that, have not posted to anyone else...explain if possible

word, constructive criticism only makes you better, much respect. sounds good audio, far from bitten.
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You just post in 3 other open mics and tell them what you think about it and give them tips on how to make it better...you said you read the rules but you didnt follow them apparently...this is Closed for right now....I will be nice and if you PM me 3 links of replies i will re-open this for you.