OFFENSIVE VOCABULARY
AK maintaining rhymes simplistic no errors for no fixing
slanging vibes lyrically i'm enriching on note never slipping
genuine style of battling has became more assiduous
assertive more actions are now all ambiguous
staying on my offensive's making leads comprehensive
slaying open defensive's faking weak a bench of
rappers dat don't internally compose their mental fatigue
apparatus of left open right long bright sleeves
mediocre school boy transfered to school rapper
facing his battling fears like it was fear factor
offensive disses been scribbled and scrambbled
witnessed my intellect of rap chissiled and scrabbled
dis is jus to shed a shadow of my highlight
of how I bled and bat hoes wasn't even right
till I kept grinding and gritting my offensive consciousness
tears shed finding and fitting to high staked promises



DEFENSIVE VOCABULARY
AK's tuneful pleasures gaining perspectives and defensives
who's da fool better paying off electives and has 0 misses
you've all saw da vibe and heard da melodic rhythm and beats
at da time I paused because my defending was built too weak
being quiet non violenty and moving swiftly
any riots and silently getting capped like fifty
told to have a cold shoulder and be tranquil
folds and molds on up to my lyrical build
procrastinated undeniably been out dated
infatuated piling over me so I raked it
I got a division of two hemisphere quadrants intact
to most deez deaf niggas go unchanted in a flash
I find I have weakened forts, dams, and walls in my life
my brain is da left and right quadrant hooking up pipes
sending nerve signals like private messages
blending words sophisticated making lessons as
to keep my psyche wild and destructive
i'm weak, but God holds my defense up

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*Nashville city*

give me feedback and here are my 3 links on dis shit

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6454#post996454

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6512#post996512

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...161#post1000161

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interesting concept...thought you had some good vocab thrown in there.....thought the second was a better verse ....both lost the flow in places.....but mostly stayed on....yeah not bad.....the scheme could use a bit of work......but still was decent...pZ

^^..yeah..this shit is tight..I liked the idea..nice compare and contrast..good vocabualry..I personally myself will vote for the Defensive verse..you just came much harder...I give this a 8/10..peace out

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daaaaaam, dat shit was off da hook dog. nice creativity on the two drops. vocabulary was entence and on a higher level. it looks like you studied da whole alphabet. tight shit dog, i should do da same in order to up my vocab skills. None da less, this is one of my favorites.

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