Just random shit and random spit, no need to build up punch lines to beat niggaz wit, ill get the hardest critique bein told my shit aint unique, it dont matter I can change it faster than mystique, racin down the boulevard, passin cars, spreadin faster than SARS wit over 6 thousand RPM bars, damn near red lining, i run the yellow with bad timing, cops pull me over and ask about my speed, a 400 dollar ticket is the last thing that I need, i wouldve been fine if i hadnt smoked a bowl out of a bamboo reed, shouldve just packed a spliff, or better yet a bong, pass it on to a fine ass lady and when wasted she show that thong, more or less im wrong about all of my lifes choices, my conscience needs to pipe down with him and his positive voices, sometimes i just need to do it even if its bad, at least that way I wouldnt look back all the time and thinkin about what i coulda had.

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

One person is PaYce, other is ToX, the other is TheUnderrated,
and I honestly dont give a fuck about feedback, I just wanted to write, so go ahead and pick apart my rhyme about everyday life

your shit was bangin hit my hail mary and down 2 ride keep it up

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Strengths: kept on topic, keep on rhyming, kept a pretty descent flow, hell I even like the topic you were talking about

Weaknesses: Structure needs to be worked on but besides that I liked it all

Conclusion: You pretty much have what it takes to be freestyler, keep up the good work on this type of thing and you'll do just fine by people like me

thanks ill work on structure