You're one of many,
You think about death,
You sit on your bed,
Trying to cover your head,
You want out so bad,
But you're to afraid,
Not of what's next,
But of a different day,
You try but you always fail,
One more mistake and you'll go straight to hell,
You don't really care anymore,
You want it to be over,
You're so sick of all the sorrow of tomorrow,
You can't take the way people look at you,
You need just one more thing to pull you through,
And you're life will leave out of the blue,
You've sat and thought of the ways,
And all those messed up days,
You hurt yourself,
To get back at them,
You just want it all to come to an end,
You're tried and weary,
One more pill and it'll all be blurry,
Sick of people talking crap,
Tried of not giving it back,
You want it all so bad,
But at the same time you're so sad,
You think about your future,
All you see is a blank picture,
You have nothing to live for,
You're scared of the next step,
There you stand,
With a gun in your hand,
You're ready now,
Thought about it for awhile,
One squeeze will end it,
No more sorrow,
Here's you're chance,
Don't let go,
Go ahead blow.

THIS IS MI FIRST POST SO LEMMIE KNO WAT U THINK

It is good. I enjoyed it much. If I were a judge you would be not guilty.

OddPants go sit down plz!

Any way it was interesting a little plain and kinda boring at times
but you got your point across. Simply but simple is good in my eye.
um....Could have been more creative....Had a flow but it was dead.
Keep doin ya thing as time progresses you'll get better shoo I'm
still elevatin myself so there is hope

Oh yea and I did like it

Thanx 4 tha replys hopefully ill be able to elevate sometyme soon but anyways hopefully i kan do tha sayme 4 u guyz. so thanx again 4 tha honest feedbak

hmm, this poem...i wont lie i did not read it all couse it was too long and in my opinion(which doesnt mean its tru) it was boring. i like the message. very nice imagery. the intro was better good but then it lost its point. i enjoyed it for a while. good stuff with the message u just gotta find a way to get it across better. i like it sum. outa 10 id give it 7. nice, good message, alright imagery. keep doin ya thing till ya get it right, thats all i can say.

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Your welcome!

L.A.STR~E~TZ are you being nice cause this is a female?? and
you like her avater?

nope, just honest feedback. hell i dont even know if its a real girl so it dont matter to me. just gonna say wats on my mind.

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..It's aright..a little long and it seemed like it dragged on a little..but, it had it pluses..I liked how you kept it simple to get your point across..Good-Bye...

i liked i'm quite new to RB, so i find it very interesting. hmmmmmmm....

Keep it up
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