Rules:
5 Bars (10 lines)
30 minutes from Check-In Both Must Post
No Crew / Hate / DR Votes
First to 5 Wins

This is gonna be a Real One Son... Let's get this one in the Hall of Fame. Bring Your HEAT!!!

Hope you're comfortable with 34-5... Nah... No hate... Let's Get It On!

checking in

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i'll spit later tonight or tom

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Huh china.

Checking In... Been Waiting For This... Let's Get It Popping... Tonight Preferably... I'll Spit within 30min.

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Let's Examine Your Chances, As I Flip Styles from Drunken Monkey To Praying Mantis //
This Bulletproof Monk Glances, switching Stances, pulls his Lyrical Sword & Advances //

Your Cellular Structure gets blown to bits, with ten swift hits of these superior wits //
Leaving you locked in a pit, of your own cellular waste, lifeless, ya brain starts having fits //

You ain't equipped, like Gollum you wish, you could get your hands on this "Precious" gift //
You lost your way here son, sold your soul for 50 Cent left the heart of your flow adrift //

But even amidst, all the hate and battle slander that you'll spit at me, I am the epitomy //
Your untimely punches & weak multi lines, show RB that you ain't on a level to rhyme with me //

Even pics of Pun in ya sig couldn't make u Big, in the end you only live by the fire of ya flow //
I know this ain't your callin though, Ain't No Law In Physi(k)s gonna stop Your Falling yo //

Aight kid... that's me.... Let's see what you working with.

of course that sh*t is crazy son.... I did this shit while my brother was logged in... my bust... I'm reposting properly... DQ it if ya want... if ya want me to spit again I can do that too... Whatever's Good... You Call It...

^^who the fuck is you?

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Huh china.

Let's Examine Your Chances, As I Flip Styles from Drunken Monkey To Praying Mantis //
This Bulletproof Monk Glances, switching Stances, pulls his Lyrical Sword & Advances //

Your Cellular Structure gets blown to bits, with ten swift hits of these superior wits //
Leaving you locked in a pit, of your own cellular waste, lifeless, ya brain starts having fits //

You ain't equipped, like Gollum you wish, you could get your hands on this "Precious" gift //
You lost your way here son, sold your soul for 50 Cent left the heart of your flow adrift //

But even amidst, all the hate and battle slander that you'll spit at me, I am the epitomy //
Your untimely punches & weak multi lines, show RB that you ain't on a level to rhyme with me //

Even pics of Pun in ya sig couldn't make u Big, in the end you only live by the fire of ya flow //
I know this ain't your callin though, Ain't No Law In Physi(k)s gonna stop Your Falling yo //

Aight kid... that's me.... Let's see what you working with.

Like I said... it's mine and it's all orignial... but you say what you want to happen...

i'll spit in a lil bit bro keying now

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check

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Huh china.

Damn Bro... been like am hour and 20 minutes and you still keying your flow... U Trying to get me nervous or something... It won't work kid...

Nah just joking.... but Damn.

Don't worry I aint holding you to the 30mins or DQ

Yo where you at?
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Aight check it

Disabled organs we can reuse, like virgin porno puss, Hero will loose//
Leave you laid back on the ground sippin juice, eyes slit like jinn, take abuse//

Nobodies felling your flows like touching your mouth with no hands//
You cant land, turn your Heros sheets from red to white like the Klu Klux klan//

In need of tutor, hit the middle of your leg like "so knee" computers//
Plunder like looters, youll never be precise like gone blind sharp shooters//

Its like you eat donkeys the way all you do is spit ass, no class?//
You wont pass, you stink like riding past fuel stations the way you pass gas//

Like opposite, Jehovah witness, you dont come to me bullets come to you//
Career over before it began like a gundown underground rapper debut//




1st bar: Parts from the chorus Jin & Juice by Snoop dogg... Jin.. Asian rapper
2nd bar: Red to white...rape him he bleeds..red..I nut...white lol
3rd bar: Sony
5th bar: Jehovah witness come to your door sometimes

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Huh china.

Aight cool... let's get some votes up in here. Good Luck Kid - You'll Need it.

Nah Good Battle - Let the Honest Voting Commence
No Crap Votes - Please Explain Your Votes, We Trying To Elevate Here!

a mod can you delete his other verse

it looks messy and fp

ayo shorten your bars some man they a lil stretched

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Huh china.

I hear you kid I actually checked them against a beat though and it was cool... just like I would've spit it... maybe just different styles... but I appreciate the critique. Trying to Elevate... Yeah it looks crazy with the double post... hope they can delete it.

meta - good punches, nice flow, structure was good, no personals (but im tired so i dunno), better vocab

moh - ok punches, flow was ok, structure was aight, personals werent there, vocab

vote - meta