Eyelids never heavy juss widen from the lights-of-the-screens...
my comp stays at a site-of-my-dreams but the sight-of-it-seems...
as if i was alone again only consolment was with a night-wit-the-lean...
but the slightness-of-themes that convulses my mind says a plight-was-in-scheme...
but to put my finger on it is hard since it quietly-gleams ive frightfully-seen...
so no wonder sleep has become my enemy that i fight-wit-my-screams...
its an evil thats spits on me, calls me names and spites-my-esteem...
that burns within my pen igniting-my-reams and feeds me to spriting-regimes....
my concious is lost and the insomnia takes hold my eyes-decieve...
and the cries-perceived hold no bearing since i think its juss lies-believed...
that this thing called sleep is another thing that tries-to-grieve...
but this insomnia is what tricks you into this under its guise-of-theives...
its stealing my time and my dreams are filled with nothingness...
and the time in my dreams become nothing or something less...
but this insomnia continues and the inner walls become but a shell...
confining myself to the bounds of my imagination but blocked by insomnia's hell...
its only the beginning of this i feel ill always be blocked-by-its-gates...
or mocked-by-its-stake till i give up and become locked-in-this-fate...
only to be seen by the weight of my eyes as i stock-up-the-wait...
until i am able to finally sleep as if i had been walking-through-states...
but the time isnt here and this hell comes with full force to keep-me-awake...
but by the time i seemingly-wake this fatigue will be gone since i was sleeping-the-aches...

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Mag-T
Deception

some multis were ok others seemed forced..and they dont need pointed out...the topic was ok....content ok.vocab quite good....nuthin special overall....try and get the multis more natural sounding....jus keep working on it....pZ