Replied to:

Baron Mynd
s.R.
Johnny 6-feet

This is to all the shitty rappers on the sight

You guys walk around in Brooklyn t-shirts thinkn' it will make you a rapper
your baggy jeans won't take you away from your broken home life that was fractured
and you scream because daddy left you before you were a teen... no gifts to unwrap
and your mother works three jobs in the ghetto scene... mother high on caffeine
and your house needs to be cleaned... the fuckn' floor has turned green
in between working the machines at the factory... there might be sometime for you
but when you have the flu and have to stay home from school, the IRS comes through
'cause you're getting evicted and you need an analytical review (Ha!Ha!)
But guess what? Im rich as fuck and live on a fuckn' golf club... you are stuck as fuck
down on your luck, but maybe it will come up if you show respect for others
young bangers is coming through with a blast, like fuckn' unlicensed truckers
so walk the walk down the sidewalk rapping with your headphones on... I don't give a fuck
The music gets louder when you're proud of it and I think this song is my lover
Sorry young Mike but right now I've got the mic and I've got to speak to these dicks
Take a whiff of my shit and then jump off my terrice... you can't rap worth a lick

thats good but my shit was grimmy but its all good

__________________
JR.delinquents

thanks

rhymeshcme is mad entended makes for a harder read, but the content was coo.

keep elevatin

I think you can do better on the Structure, you might want to work with vocab little and the title of this thread and what your rappin' about doesn't some to connect. This shit was alright, but you definately need to elevate, keep doin' ya' shit though.

thanks for the feedback guys