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all rules

u spit first!

aiight

dw as i prepare to see u ~Chrode slowly~
in ur death cause u aint even born u a Froze ~Embroe hurting~
but all i cn see is a bitch from from manchester so u ~Full of Shit~
if i was in ur country i would break ur spine and bury u~Fool Quik~
man i see u a estimator wat u estimate how big ~Centrals diks~
are, 1 of ur crew members said man he estimates how big his ~anal is~
i said why?every one has been in him till he bleeds and his ripped his~ Ventrical to shit~
look im gonna see ur human body fluids ~Decintergrate Externally~
ur crew shouold slow down or they get a bullet in high ~Penetrate Internally~
as this comes to closure, ur mind and internal organs killed like a bitch bein ~Raped Constantly~

aiight uppin ur verse

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aiight hurry up and get ur verse in lol
i dunt want this battle to go on any longer then u want it to go on for

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killing fake emcees like a Isolated~Orphan/
u think u have skills step to me so i can Dislocate~ur~Organs//

my tolert level is low n bein put to the test...
u spit 10 lines n not one stood out or impressed...
jus wanted to exclaim to ya RIP..in pieces u'll rest...
tolerant u surpass wack wen even the pope cudnt make u blessed...
now u begin to realise u shud av wore a bullet proof vest...
imma fire 2 rounds at ya back so u stick out ur chest...
...wiv pride...like me...yeh im from manchester...
but im the one wiv wins that ur still to register...
u way out of ur league like a low division team in a cup tie...
why oh why did u even try...spit hot rhymes in ya ear to watch ya brains fry....1

aiight nice drop uppin for votes #1................................
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aight...

tolerant levels punches were pretty weak. no real wordplay, but he had a personal in there...still not great tho.

dw had better punches but it still wasnt great. however, the wordplay was better, and structure was pretty good.

vote: dw

i spend time on your battles, do the same for me:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...adid=102139--vs 730

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...readid=101943-- vs prophacyz

ite pretty average battle... heres how i saw it...


Tolerant:

nothing really stood out, you keep on the same style of using violen lines, and your pressing that too much, maybe its okay for a set up, but you miss the whole punch line by staying on that kind of concept, you really need to start developing witty punches and new creative concepts in battles...


dw:

hmmmm... okay verse, you had some okay lines, but only thing thats gonna drop you down in my voting, is the fact that you feeded off his verse, like flipped his idea', yea im from manchester and that, it might be good as a personal, but you shouldnt feed off a verse... some average lines, okay concepts, but nothing really strong... so this is how i saw it...


Tolerant/dw: out of 10...

punches: 2/3 - both indirect, but dw's were wittier...
personals: 2/2 - kinda close, nothing really great from either...
wordplay: 2/2 - tie again, both had some idea's nothing great...
flow/multi's: 2/3 - TL had basic rhyme scheme, not consistant, dw was a bit better and had some okay multi's...
creativity: 2/4 - TL stayed with violence, dw had more varied topics...

overall: 10/14...


both need to elevate... im surprised dw has 49 wins with such a simple verse structure... Tolerant you have potential but need to develop punches and creative idea's to help you out,

props to both emcee's... stay up. 1.


VOTE = DW



and if either of you could vote on my battle vs BuzzKill... its really getting slept on and needs any votes... so if either of you could drop an honest vote we'd both appreciate it...

^^^gud vote but dawg i did that in bout 3 mins flat n i knew i didnt av to come hard....don't be fooled!.......................1

pretty blah battle.....
punches DW(more direct...tolerant was a lil passive)
flo DW(tolerant was choppier thatn him...both were choppy tho)
met4- tolerant(his were more creative and original...)
multi- none(blah)
overall- DW(his was just set a lil better torwards tolerant.....it almost look'd like tolerant tried too hard....very forced....)

both drop an honest vote here thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=103318

well gotta give htis to dw... tolerants punches came weak and dont fucking do this shit ~***~***~ its fucking annoying....
dw had some nice lines his verse wus ive seen alot better...
but tolerant level just needs to elevateyou needa add metas n personals on him your personals were weak as shit....
put in some multis too... saw a little form u but not much...
dw gets my vote on harder hittin punches flow/structure n metas..
hit up any battlez in my sig... and DW clean out ya pMs box so when i pm you it dont say its full... n check central forum... ThanX...
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TL had very weak punches... TERRIBLE DISPLAY!

DW has so many wins cuz he beat newbies like this... get a easy win then lose to a vet... simply told...

ok battle

my vote-DW....

Caesar - On3

tolerante verse:

dw as i prepare to see u ~Chrode slowly~
in ur death cause u aint even born u a Froze ~Embroe hurting~
but all i cn see is a bitch from from manchester so u ~Full of Shit~
if i was in ur country i would break ur spine and bury u~Fool Quik~
man i see u a estimator wat u estimate how big ~Centrals diks~
are, 1 of ur crew members said man he estimates how big his ~anal is~
i said why?every one has been in him till he bleeds and his ripped his~ Ventrical to shit~
look im gonna see ur human body fluids ~Decintergrate Externally~
ur crew shouold slow down or they get a bullet in high ~Penetrate Internally~
as this comes to closure, ur mind and internal organs killed like a bitch bein ~Raped Constantly~

pretty weak pounches
ok personal
meta

DW verse:

my tolert level is low n bein put to the test...
u spit 10 lines n not one stood out or impressed...
jus wanted to exclaim to ya RIP..in pieces u'll rest...
tolerant u surpass wack wen even the pope cudnt make u blessed...
now u begin to realise u shud av wore a bullet proof vest...
imma fire 2 rounds at ya back so u stick out ur chest...
...wiv pride...like me...yeh im from manchester...
but im the one wiv wins that ur still to register...
u way out of ur league like a low division team in a cup tie...
why oh why did u even try...spit hot rhymes in ya ear to watch ya brains fry....1

opener:better pounch using tolentes name(personal)
flow:had a better flow to my reading he had a better structre but could use a bit of work
metas:closer was hot...lol

overall vote with a better verse

DW

--vote my battle in sig
--i took the tine

peace

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