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Freestyle

Aiiyo mofuckas, sayin they dont like my style,mo fuckas in the street sayin they dont like, the way i act all i gotta say is FUCK YOU nigga this is me man


Im straight thugged out...stick to ill freestyles
about bein drugged out....flow to these beats wild
Im making money...cooking up o's in the kitchen
You got a hoe bitchin....bout wen the rents in
keep talking shit .....youll both get smoked liked a benson
and hedges mo'fucka....did I mention i got balls like tennis mo'fucka
Americas nightmare....like o-dogg in menace mo'fucka
cause if i get famous....ima have the USA shittin
I a grimy bad boy.....all the way from great britain
I make mad money...which i refuse to earn
deprived of education...cause i refuse to learn
15 on the streets.....ima national concern
sum nigga tried 2 put in a coffin....now that nigga in an urn
cause im rap fire....Im hot you never heard of me?
im like a mom...the way i give a nigga 3rd degrees
leave whack niggas checked....like burberry
talk shit i'll open up ya belly....like surgery
ya'll got me mad...so ima do sum murdering
I roll up haze.....wit my boys and get high
ima real reanegade...like royce da' 59
you wanna step up...teat your voice and thats fine
cause yall wack bitches....get played like toys wen i rhyme-motherfukers!!


feed back plz

could somebody plz give me some feedback on the above freestyle.

It kinda of confusion... But I guess its descent....

Try to even out your bars when ya freestyle....

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Mystic (Traitor)

uppin this 4 more feedback

yea it was decent..you coulda done better but it was a "freestyle" so w/e...structure coulda been better tho...

peace

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more feedback plz

yo, my guns dont weigh 4 pounds they weigh a metric ton
they not the size of 50 or bowwow thay the size of big pun
and the shells do damage they dont only polk through
they leave holes in yo body big enough to walk through
i come up to yo crib wit the night gear
flick on the switch and the inf beam appear
load up, cock back, make sure the room is clear
then i leave yo brains hangin on the ceiling like a chandalier
i wont hesitate i play my part
like vin diesel i show you what tears a man apart
you get a little chain and bracelet so what you wanna floss
i'll take yo shit shoot yo adams apple and turn it into apple sauce
Im good wit the guns but I'm better wit my hands
I take you or any one of yo mans
dont matter who it is you claim to be an enemy
i duck dodge weave and hit you so many times you'll think there was ten of me
when my hands swell up thats when i cause the most harm
i'll tear off yo limbs and beat you wit yo own arms
hit you wit the fifth leave you bloody like a bitch wit her period
cock back and put an end to you point blank period...........

HollA BacK

feed back plz

Feedback?you a bitch.....posting rhymes on my thread
i asked for opinions....so you rewrite my rhyme instead
you real hard on the internet....real life shook and shit
cause i got big gunz.....like i was funded by the goverment
Its like track and field...the way i got u bitch niggas running it
all it takes is these rhymes.....to make my heat shine
but it'll take more than weak rhymes...to make B-shyne
but fuck it,lets rewind......back to the begining
feedback? this cocksucker......wants an opinion
I aint gonna lie.......i like ya rhymes
Like ya style....cause that styles mine
im like lenox lewis in a battle....you mike tyson
both got hard punches...but in a fight u be biting
when it comes to beef......im like moses i be smiting
your first born child.....in the middle of the night
niggaz walk to ya house....and just rush in
leave the whole family...stone cold-like steve austin
my lines sharp.....they cuttin him down making him less
im like buffy......the way i sick a stake in his chest
he aint a real thug....this nigga fake at his best
its like you the crazy 88...im the bride got you terrified
so fuck mass murder...im commiting genocide. bitch

feedback plz

This Is A Pretty Whack Open Mic You Sound Like 50 Cent You Have No Vocab Or Anything This Wuz Really Crappy 3/10 For Effort I Guess

OMG there's like an Open Mic Cypher...

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Only God can judge me, Who THE FUCK IS YOU?!

^^^Amen my man...

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Soft Focus
Suicide Inc.
RhymeVantage
Def.Ill
Ghost-Writers

Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..

fuck yall