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Old 01-02-04, 08:30 AM   #1
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My mind is overflowed, trapped in an elevated level~of~stress
Hell constrantly quizzes my mind, Sins are a devilish~test
My pride grows weary, but I continue on a sullivant~quest
Fate detereorates my heart, I inherited a delicate~chest
Now, I lay rampant ferocity over towering my competition
With flagrant velocity, Kill foes wit no remorseful decisions
Constant injections of weed recently distored da vision
All my knowledge locked dowm...Entire resources imprisioned
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Old 01-02-04, 08:56 AM   #2
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yeah, well vocab overload of complexity which worked..flow was good..all i can advise you on is to use metas and more multis to improve this..it was short yet sweet...
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Old 01-02-04, 11:48 AM   #3
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Upping for mo feedback...
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Old 01-02-04, 12:31 PM   #4
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Pretty small little verse but not bad.. flow was cool maybe neeed some more wittyness.. better pjunchs n shti but still not bad man.. keep workin at it
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Old 01-02-04, 12:33 PM   #5
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Thank God For Dictionaries Or You Would Be Stumped
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Old 01-02-04, 01:05 PM   #6
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TY for all the feedback guys...

Does anyone have any last minute feedback before I drop my next drop rhyme.....
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Old 01-02-04, 01:22 PM   #7
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this was pretty good, some nice lines and some creative thinking a nice way to explain stress, or what not. Some good vocabulary. Nice job.

Peep myn in my sig, thanks
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