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Old 01-03-04, 02:09 PM   #1
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~Elastic~cyph a feedback!

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my elastic time bubble,
stretches my day out untill my attitude is suddle,hop on the hip spaceshudle,
my psycie,wipes me into the moonlight,see,
driftin' thru portals like i was emortal,
a mistake that's fatal,but it's so simple to be,indecently the most ignorant emcee,that was me,untill this queen woke me out of my dream,now i forsee my quests single handidly,
that's why i invite me and myself to come chill with me,drink lyrics and exhale poetry,
then i'll toss the mic to the next illest emcee,
intertwine with sounds coming from the snatcher of bodies,toss some lyrics in a cypher wit 'you' and flow like lightning,climb rapbattles plateu of flow and freeze sub with zero degree melodies,walk out of a cypher grinin' from cheek to cheek,
as i speak,my brain leeks and i don't have any bandaids or gauz so the leaking gos on 4 weeks.........


lightning lit tips of lips,send scents of this shit to atract "fly"emcees,equiped with liberty,filtering out plees for me changing my gravity,cheeze frees poetry and barrys greed,plant seeds that swim upstream,sun beams i seem to fiegn,when spliens screach addiquitly,atractin'fractions subconciously of static electricity,herds of words i watch quitly,cause i'm a sheperd see,
cloned words get dismantled violently,no room for robots in my vicinity,and it's more vast then our country,so i form special teams that moniture blood streams,these screams bing ice cream melting and volcanos
erupting,plumiting on green,grassy fields were birds sing,armoring stings thicker than an igloo that an eskimo is building after he sees a summer rose bluming,jus' some crazy shit that my mind was spooning to emty computer screens that are consuming the words i am choosing to be oozing at the present timing.
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Old 01-03-04, 02:10 PM   #2
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replied to-Echo
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Old 01-03-04, 02:17 PM   #3
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Sup mayne..

You had some original shit in there, on the real abstract tip. Nice flow, and nice inner rhyme schemes on some lines too. You got an awkward structure, but i can work wit that cos thats how i write for Audio's.

Good shit overall, nice imagery and wording.

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Old 01-03-04, 02:50 PM   #4
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ouch i dont know about this one maybe i dont get it. but it diffrent
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Old 01-03-04, 03:01 PM   #5
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yeah dunny... i was really feelin this piece... type of ish i be on 99% of the time... you murdered it... very creative... i mean amazin kinda... shyt was fire... no dount ... everything was on point... no help needed...

Good Good Post

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Old 01-05-04, 10:43 AM   #6
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..Uppin..
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Old 01-07-04, 01:00 PM   #7
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...Uppin on this shit~~~~~

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Old 01-07-04, 01:03 PM   #8
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this here was dope plain and simple
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