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Old 01-04-04, 02:06 PM   #1
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CORRUPTED VISIONS: Demons Within

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What are demons, are they reasons, excuses for treason?
And are they real or imagined through you misbelieving?
What about fire breathing, soul deeming, devils
Leaving scorched bodies screaming, and rejoicing in revel
The Reaper seeking them out with bones as his medals
To the gates of hell where your soul never settles,
The threshold of evil, nestles, awaiting the next arrival
Gates of fire between the pain, with good as their rival
The good thriving, souls laid to rest, chosen and blessed
Past life’s test, now rewarded with lasting finesse……

It comes down to good versus evil, the way of religion
I say demons are within, without gods fucking kitchen
I don’t listen to fiction… curing cripples! That fish thing!…
Two many ‘miracles’ for this dawg to believe in cos
The world’s been struck with too much misconceiving
No God was ever born and was… never breathing
No use-feeling dependant on a thing that’s invented,
Ya not repented, if ya was then… then ya still resented
Its misrepresented, this book was born for weak minds
Through hard times, characters invented, the naïve kind
Living blind, combined with the age of time…

So there aint no demons literal, their merely mythical
But they’re in the brains, plotting, leave some people difficult
Its invisible but visible, through rage anger, the miserable
Lying red eyed some die, but is that permissible,
Or are we wishful to think that ‘good’ should be it all
Rein alone, is the balance is too tall to softly fall?
Jin and yang, equilibrium with demons n the right call
A certain pivot is needed… cos without arms you wont crawl…..
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Old 01-04-04, 02:13 PM   #2
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Very enjoyable to read.... The words made sense and the flow was nice.....

To make this better, try to stay on topic... It seems as if you drifting off a lot in this writing.... Try to stay focused on your topice.... The 1st and 3rd verse was find, but I got lost in what you were tryna state in the 2nd verse.....
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Old 01-04-04, 03:50 PM   #3
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really liked this,it really made me wanna read more. its very catchy, and some really good vocab.keep producin this stuff, its really tight
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Old 01-04-04, 04:08 PM   #4
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I enjoed reading this drop, nice vocab, good flow, decent all around, i caught what you were saying, i jsut wish u guys all iddnt put corrupted visions before your drops, kinda makes it look noobish...good drop pc
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Old 01-04-04, 08:14 PM   #5
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Yo deva This Shit was nice man....ya used ya flow and structure as ya always do........this topic was nice ya Did not Play it.......ya always Has Nice Vocab man........i do think ya could improve on ya last Verse on it......But all and all man this was and alrite Scripture........ Keep it Droping KuZ....PeacE.....
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Old 01-04-04, 08:47 PM   #6
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if deva ever makes a braging track, im going to reply and say shut up i already beat you in a battle your not that nice.
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Old 01-04-04, 08:48 PM   #7
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Hmmm...Decent effort here, Your opener represented your strongest lines...This was decent, But good structure and flow and all that good shit. Nice effort.
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Old 01-05-04, 03:51 AM   #8
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C-section wtf you talking bout....grow up.......
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Old 01-05-04, 03:57 AM   #9
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yo Deva...remember me?????? lol...this shit was hot...I caught on the concept...but at the same time it was kinda abstract ya know...I like that...and of course y'all British truffle eaterz are alwayz on point with the vocab...and the flow was good too...now holla at my shit...it's called "Guess Who"...
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Old 01-05-04, 07:58 AM   #10
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thnx Thieves...who ever you are!...lol...do i know you??.......pZ twin............look forward to doin a collab...lataz...
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Old 01-05-04, 08:10 AM   #11
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this shit was ill, not many flaws that you can really pick up on, everything was on point, flow, structure, vocab, etc etc.

very nice, keep up the consistency!!!
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Old 01-05-04, 10:07 AM   #12
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Pretty f-n dope. I definetly agree with you, especially in the last verse. There has to be a balance to everything, including good and evil. Good and bad, not Good or Bad. But you even told me that I should talk about something less played out. That's been talked about since pretty much the beginning of time, bro. But, your word usage is close to phenominal. You were using the right words in the right place. Definetly dope.

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Old 01-05-04, 10:48 AM   #13
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yeah it was a played topic...but i didnt play it.....pZ...n thnx
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