..First 7 votes to win...

The longevity of your words beckons a "short-coming" like brevity/
exceptionally, I make "readers laugh" like "stand up comedy"/
because I insult you phonically/
like I got "chris farley standin next to me", and I be/
usin his punchlines to "keel you over" like "flipping ships"/
"rippin your face off", illustrates how "impossible this mission is"/
attrition hits, equal detrimental blasts like fists/
you couldn't give me "half your mind"/ because then I'd have "all of it"/
initiate keratectomies on the readers of this ish/
then they'd be "seein darkness", exactly the color that my soul is/
I'm in control now/
like tyranny I take your typographical script/
and formulate hypothetical myths/
about how your ass got ripped/
some proclaim "a gay man did it!"/
but how could that be when you "don't get out" like "life convicts"/
for one you aint secular or religious, possibly promiscuous, and yeah, your rhymes "aint tight" like a "virgin" is!/
so it could have been a battle gone wrong against "Penskills"/
I "lit your expression" up like "carvings in a pumpkins"/
committed seven counts of "prostate stabbin", like "knockin out your emissions"/
killin people by the "numbers in your house", like "long division"/
with "precision like dentists", I "drill you for the crown"/
astound onlookers when they realize "that you're going down"/
"propounded like applications", your crew will replace you with "lyrical intoxication"/
drunken defeated ya, repleted and conceded ya/
"wasted you like oxygen", you're lucky to be "breathin", brah!/

yo...

you sound real brainy-but bitch i wonder do you give brain?//
coz as soft as your lyrics are-my torturous flow is insane//
took 1 look at my school book an was frozen straight shook//
penskills rather nofrills, baby help me, teach this nigga how 2cook//
bitches like you watse time-trying to rhyme, girl you'll neva shine//
lyrics sound so shitty an elementary, sounds like u cant rhyme or u blind//
is it an offence 2 mention tha big wart in your soul//
this will explain the lack of talent in yo skit, now bitch reveal that mole//
show everybody yo real beauty,h.i.v- and a flow like mace//
chomp chomp-feeding yo fat ass stomach-nofrills what i tel ya bout chomping wit out saying grace//
feeling down so low-everybody see's u as a waste of space//
like the ugly duckling in the pond, u aint earned yo place//
Gods mistake, you fucked up, how long b4 u break//
i eat yo wack lyrics breakfast-and wipe the crumbz of my plate//
you fake-1 of them gothic bitches who slit thier wrist//
aint no mercy-shit trick-ready 4 me to slit yo lip//

penskillz got dis one. his shit jus was better all the way around.
but my vote doesnt count............................................. ......................

..Penskills[1]

..80shots[0].............................

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explain ur votes....Or it will be deleted.....anyhow explain like this.

Ok this is what i thought.

penskillz: structure VERY VERY VERY long...and to much to read.....Punches:came good and tough keep them coming...Personals:welll well well. same as the punches but there could be better ways u can express them.complex was bad. so was the flow.

Overall percentage: 5/10

88shots:Stucture^same as i said the other...To much to read hurts my eyes...narrow it down...U both lose on this...next thing punches were ill...but not enough....Personals came weak...u need to make ur structures smaller and the personals and punches will be easy to catch. Flow was off a little bit...

overall percentage: 4.5/10

u see the overalls...u do the math

..Penskills[2]..
..80shots[0]..

Penskills

The longevity of your words beckons a "short-coming" like brevity/
exceptionally, I make "readers laugh" like "stand up comedy"/
because I insult you phonically/
like I got "chris farley standin next to me", and I be/
Good vocabulary but bad structure
usin his punchlines to "keel you over" like "flipping ships"/
"rippin your face off", illustrates how "impossible this mission is"/
attrition hits, equal detrimental blasts like fists/
you couldn't give me "half your mind"/ because then I'd have "all of it"/ Some good metaz.. but u might wanna re-word
initiate keratectomies on the readers of this ish/
then they'd be "seein darkness", exactly the color that my soul is/
Sounds like a poem lol
I'm in control now/
like tyranny I take your typographical script/
and formulate hypothetical myths/
about how your ass got ripped/
some proclaim "a gay man did it!"/
but how could that be when you "don't get out" like "life convicts"/
Get Rid of the /< - - ppl here dont like em lol
for one you aint secular or religious, possibly promiscuous, and yeah, your rhymes "aint tight" like a "virgin" is!/
so it could have been a battle gone wrong against "Penskills"/
I "lit your expression" up like "carvings in a pumpkins"/
committed seven counts of "prostate stabbin", like "knockin out your emissions"/
killin people by the "numbers in your house", like "long division"/
Umm.... 1st to 7 voteS? around here its 5 lol
with "precision like dentists", I "drill you for the crown"/
astound onlookers when they realize "that you're going down"/
"propounded like applications", your crew will replace you with "lyrical intoxication"/
drunken defeated ya, repleted and conceded ya/
"wasted you like oxygen", you're lucky to be "breathin", brah!/
Wow.. u need some work.. and r u a girl or guy? lol

80Shots

you sound real brainy-but bitch i wonder do you give brain?//
coz as soft as your lyrics are-my torturous flow is insane//
So much easier to read.. but get rid of the //<- -
took 1 look at my school book an was frozen straight shook//
penskills rather nofrills, baby help me, teach this nigga how 2cook//
Wack... lol wtf?
bitches like you watse time-trying to rhyme, girl you'll neva shine//
lyrics sound so shitty an elementary, sounds like u cant rhyme or u blind//
LMAOOO nice last line
is it an offence 2 mention tha big wart in your soul//
this will explain the lack of talent in yo skit, now bitch reveal that mole//
LMAOOOOOOo... wow funny
show everybody yo real beauty,h.i.v- and a flow like mace//
chomp chomp-feeding yo fat ass stomach-nofrills what i tel ya bout chomping wit out saying grace//
That dont rhyme to me
feeling down so low-everybody see's u as a waste of space//
like the ugly duckling in the pond, u aint earned yo place//
LMAO... hillarious.. i like humor
Gods mistake, you fucked up, how long b4 u break//
i eat yo wack lyrics breakfast-and wipe the crumbz of my plate//
Dont ever diss God like that... seriously
you fake-1 of them gothic bitches who slit thier wrist//
aint no mercy-shit trick-ready 4 me to slit yo lip//
Nice stereotype

Although 80shots had good structure... penskills had good vocab and both of yall had humor...

vote-penskills..

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..Penskills[3]
..80shots[0]

Breakdown:

Punches: Penskills
Flow: Definetly 80Shots
Creativity: Penskills
Vocab: Penskilsl
Opener: Neither
Closer: Niether
Enjoyment: Penskills

Overall: Penskills

Ya both need ta elevate a lot, but decent battle all aroun'...but Penskils took it by a lilbit...an Pen r ya a guy or a girl?

Punches:Penskills
Flow:80Shots
Creativity:Penskills
Vocab: Penskilsl
Opener:tie
Closer:tie


vote=Penskills

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106583
pplz vote on this its being slept on...

..Penskills[4]
..80shots[0]

looks like u got this penskills, lookz like i gotta elevate, well thats what ima do-good battle-in ya, and yo thanks to all the replies! keep them commin

the current vote score is:

Penskills: 2
80Shots: 0

so how come penskills saying she got 5.

u need more than a hundred post to vote on a pole, only the votes on the pole count!

so the current score is:

Penskills: 2
80Shots: 0

Punches: Penskills
Flow: Definetly 80Shots
Creativity: Penskills
Vocab: Penskilsl
Opener: Neither
Closer: Niether
Enjoyment: Penskills

Overall: Penskills

Soz 80shot but pen was better