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skiddz
mentill
johnny-6-feet

death is restless, despite relentless repentance//
he yearns for earth to burn with sulphuric stenchs//
he senses, that our world is falling to chaotic ruin//
his hand clenchs the evil and hate that we've been brewin//
deaths in wars attracts scores of deamons from hells deepest cores//
dragging more infidels to the floor of brimstone shores//
moralities backbone is tore, opens the door to apocalyptic battle//
society dismantles, and frigid winds blow the fire from its candle*//
he tirelessly watchs,and campaigns against rightousness//
and destroys those who reign and those who fight for this//
takes lives and conquers with, a hand becoming of pervasive evil//
one that abolishs the last stand and persuades the feeble//
to join an army of disciples, common trifles turn into war for titles//
**a recitle of misguided rifles firing upon an innocent child**//
a long line of single filed men march into thier fates//
unable to defend against the destiny that awaits//
lives negate, eventually ceasing all living existence//
he non-intentionally broke the never-ending repitition//
and now i wait, for another life in this world to be passed//
or for my own meak reality to be stripped from my grasp//
i ask myself; how long must it last, before ive finished my task?//

bahh, it got all fucked up when i pasted it, oh well...

Wait. I don't get it. did you copy that from somewehre?

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no i didn't copy it off someone, i write all my rhymes in wordpad then cut and paste them onto here if i think they are worth while...

quit sleeping on this!

thought this had a nice level of complexity... wasnt very original tho... but well worded...most flowed good... lost the rhyme once i think...which let it down a bit...but yeah i liked it...good drop...pZ...

Yeah i thought this was nice piece here.....your structure in this was alright...just watch some lines length though....it flowed pretty well i thought, it kinda got off at some points through out the piece but still was good....but overall this was good piece...keep at it.

thank yall for the feedback, uppin for the last time...

nicely done, reppin for tha dynasty, wasnt off the wall but nice work, better than at least 80% of the rappers on here

i thought it was really good, you are really creative........had really good wordplay and i think it was put together nicely.........pz