Guest Speaker (Sir Franklyn John):
Erm goodmorning, 80SHOTS we gotta do something man, nodody's keeping it real anymore, but hey i guess we can be fake. look at artist like rule an ll cool j they makeing money and there rapping for hoes. so what should we do,

80SHOTS: listen dogg you need to chill, tell me what you think about this...

where i come from, it aint nothing but murderous looks/
joints hoes niggaz mexicans that rap wit the illset hookz/
you get shot-you dont even feel it, use to the pain/
every days a rainy day, got nothing to loose an nufin 2gain/
the sky's blue, but you are to, from the constant pain of cold/
so many years as a mute, your unspoken words seem old/
every nigga wanna be a soldier,da rap game seems so tasteless/
could of got rated a thousand times, but life seems so senseless/
guns drugs fast cars bling that what every nigga needs?/
pdiddy and master-p must be rich,but damm where there talent g/
50 i rate you, but nigga you need to elevate/
in da club was aaaight, stunt 101 nigga that shit was fake/
i'm into locks, mobb deep mos def dem niggaz r real/
wordplay like drama, them niggaz skits appeal/
cant survive without my family need my mumma love constantly/
only got a picture to remember her by, aint got love for nobody/-


Guest Speaker (Sir Franklyn John): now 80 hold on right there, aint you gonna include any disses on anybody, common we gotta pump it up.

80SHOTS: well i'm aaaight wit everybody in this motha fucka.
but yo check it:

beef comes to me i handle shit like i'm gangster/
put pen to paper, an torture ya with literature/
your quick to run yo mouth, i'm quick to take u out/
no 1 like that cent u wear-its smells like bad trout/
smash a pane of glass-slit yo wrsit then use my fist/
samuri yo ass (Guest Speaker: 80 your taking the piss)
yo Guest i need no help, my lyrics pop your vane/
major artery's failing, while the blood rushed to yo brain/
no need for torture-the only thing that can stop me is god, homie/
see the fears in yo eyes, i know u scared homie/
fuck these commercial niggaz fuck nelly an fuck chingy/
yaahl niggaz know shit about tha game, but still getting money/
could battle both of ya an dismantel ya-put u in jamaica/
too much pressure-u2 fake rappaz ship yo ass back to albania/
flows so weak, i battle ya while playing hide an seek/
nigga it not worth it, beefin wit me-u end up dead in tha street/




Excuse me 2way, i would love to battle you again, but dont front nigger me and u aint friends. see some stuff u said in are battle u took it too far!..

Bitch u got brave hearted coz we were battle-in/
said a few things about me-that i know u regretting/
you fucking trick, i cant even diss you coz it aint worth it/
if you dont like me you pussy, u can suck my dick

trick! ha ha, just some lil freestyles this nigga fort of, piece out, an fuck 2way, fuck tha whole of disturbing-the-piece, fuck them niggaz!
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ha ha

Yo, this shit was alrite, in a sense i guess. But c'mon man, your throwing dissus at big time rappers, who ain't neva gunna read this shit? Keep elevating man, n keep it REAL.. Peace..

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from illness 'DeliVerence'

yo flow was good, wordplay ok, lol u dissing chingy-dat nigger buff! 4real do this was ok, just keep elevating,








maybe u should read my signature, i know u understand it-

and 4 those who dont its in spanish coz ima spanish gal, piece

This Was Decent Keep Elevatin & Droppin....

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..word up...decent piece..much better than your first post...good shceme..lacked on the vocab a little..but..alright..

thanks 4yaahl feedback, fuck hate ima elevate! piece, uppin

Yeah this was alright i thought.....your structure was ok in this...try keeping your lines around the same length so it flows better and so it makes it structure better as well.....flow in this was alright.....try adding some multies though...keep at it.