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Old 01-13-04, 02:27 AM   #1
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1st Keystyle On RapBattles.com "S.W.A.T."

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TO ALL NIGGAZ WHO AINT HOT AS S.W.A.T.

"S.W.A.T."


"Laughin-Crits" "Clap-And-Sit"...While Dro Busts Out His "Gat-N-Clip" I'll "Slap-A-Bitch" For Tryn To Put A "Trap-On-This"..S.W.A.T. Set It "Str8" SO Aint No "Pack-N-Shit" Only "Stackin-Bricks"..While "Crackin-Wigs"....Mayne S.W.A.T Just "Cappin-Nigs"....and Yall Think Yall "Stackin-Chips"?...Phonies Ya'll Just "Act-N-Bitch"....S.W.A.T. Gone "Clap-N-Hit"...All Ya'll "Fags-N-Snitch's"..Police Find Ya "Bagged-N-Ditches"...Just For Tryna "Snatch-My-Riches"....Mayne S.W.A.T. "Grasps-N-Clintches"...Guns While Ya Bodies "Magged-Then-Twisted"...."Grabbed-Then-Lifted"....Just For Us To "Laugh-N-Mention"...This Was All Cuz People's "Bad-Decision's"....S.W.A.T. Run This Board Ya'll Janitors So Grab Ya "Rags-N-Dishes"....as S.W.A.T. Starts A "Battlin-Mission"...KILLIN NIGGAZ WITH "BAD-INTENTIONS"...LEAVE'M ALL WITH "BLACKENED-VISION"....AND AINT GON' STOP UNTILL "THATS-FINISHED"//



WUT IT DO FAM??......YALL FEEL ME?...HOLLA ATCHA BOI WIT FEEDBACK...
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Old 01-13-04, 03:15 AM   #2
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WUT IT DO FAM??......YALL FEEL ME?...HOLLA ATCHA BOI WIT FEEDBACK...
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Old 01-13-04, 10:21 AM   #3
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Structure - 6/10
Flow - 7-10
Multi's - 8/10
Vocab - 7.5/10
Topic - 6/10
Originality - 8.5/10

A decent drop, your structure needs to be changed, and I wasnt really sure what u gettin at wit the topic unless swat is the name of your Crew... I felt some of your multi's were forced, it sounded good but the words didnt go properly with what u were talkin about in some points. Overall I give this a 6.5/10.

Your rhymnigs perfected, just work on better topics and I swear that will help u out alot. A better topic enables you to get deeper into what u rappin about, and u can make it longer, and it can make more sense.

with your structure.. you going

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It should have a consistant pattern like:

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Know what Im sayin?

Just keep droppin and keep elevatin.
Pz.
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Old 01-13-04, 04:23 PM   #4
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This was alright....but your structure needs some work though, dont put it in paragraph form like that, put it line on top of line like Souldja told you how to do it....you had some nice multies in this piece i thought, liked that but like souldja said some did seem forced at spots though, just watch out for that stuff....the flow was good in this i thought...but overall this was alright....keep at it.
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